Somewhere between night and day
you roller coasted
just like that
into my life,
into me…
Just look at me,
speaking out my confusion
and see what I really feel
In my heart there’s a fire,
and my soul burns
every minute of the day…
Longing for your touch
into the sunshine…
Hungry to feel more
under the full moon…
Hear me out because
I want to let you know
all…
At nights it must be easy
to hear my breaths
whispering your name…
During the days your touch
should feel
the softness of my skin,
my heat,
wanting…
Love never felt this easy
than right now,
here with you,
under my skin…
A contest entry
- Make me feel good by Whyitt U.
2200 points, ended December 19, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hear me out because I want to let you know all...
Comments
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Oh yes very good, and soooo sensual. Someone is very lucky lol UI felt a truth in this, I like it...no....I love it!!
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oooooh! How... sensual! I don't know where you get your pictures from, but that's a really good one you used here. Your words made a different picture though, and I couldn't help but smile while reading - not because it's directly happy, but because of the feel of the poem. It's quite special!
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What a beautiful, sensual feel to this...I really liked the first and the last stanzas most, especially "love never felt this easy"...this was a very pleasant read. Good Luck!
Wyatt
xxx
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very sensual
Your words speak softly and tenderly of an awakening within your heart and soul. Your longing for this person, can be felt throughout this poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Ethereal One
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Oh My Gosh!....I really like this write....very sensual. Such a deep feeling emotional power to it.
A Wonderful Work of Art!
debbie
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What a beautifully soft sensuous write that you have penned here. Beautiful imagery, and tone that captivates the reader and leaves us wanting more. Love what you have done and shared with us,
Evan
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Oh wow, I'm sure you have a bottle of gentleness tablets on your dresser. It must come from somewhere. ---- Thank you.
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brilliant poem
this is a poem written purely from life its almost like how i am feeling in ways very great write. -
where the ....Holy moly.
Well done here my dear loved it.
Great pic as well.
Thanks for sharing and wishing you the best in this contest
Tory
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