You can't see it can you?
What you've done?
I'm only this way because of what you have made me,
And I'm about to break,
Am I locked in a chamber?
A vacuum? Can't you hear?
My prayers ring out in the night but,
No one answers,
No one cares do they?
No one cares if I live or die,
Least of all me,
I care less than everyone,
If I were important I would protest,
Against the suicidal pledge,
I signed the lonely, deadly contract,
I resigned my self to the blade,
Held against my throat,
Forever,
HELP ME!
FUCKING HEAR ME! OH GOD HAVE MERCY,
I don't deserve this,
Do I?
The abuse, the loneliness?
The fear, the rejection?
This world doesn't need me,
Shunned and bannished was I,
Alas it makes no difference,
Say goodbye to me,
The one who has the forbidden love affair,
It's gone too far,
I can't cope anymore,
It's over,
Please let it be over,
I am cold,
I am dead,
Or am I?
Not really,
Just dead inside,
A shell with nothing but the pain,
Of life,
The knife calls my name,
I cannot succumb anymore,
I accept my fate,
Goodbye...
In a list
A contest entry
- Make your pain mine... by Sticks-And-Stones.
650 points, ended December 3, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think of the poem? Be honest, but not too harsh :)
Comments
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I honestly thought that this was a bit... to whiny. I mean... I do not think that you should blame anyone for your problems. I don't mean to be mean but that's just how I feel... but this isn't my contest... so good luck!
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Ow
i felt this pain and I feel myself wanting to say Goodbye.
I had to take a deep breath and step away from the computer to clear my head.
Amazing write !
Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~AJ
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I can relate to this. I know what it feels like for no one to care, and to feel like all hope is lost. I think you did an excellent job writing this!
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