Soul’s sacristy flows across sky,
waves of woe’s wonder say goodbye,
knife’s edge of breezes stifles gasps,
sorrow slips below wretched sigh.
Bravado breaks schlocky mask
leaves hoping heart in icy bask
though mind seeps wishes, willing warmth
memories motes fail in their task.
Vacant visage stares across sea
tumbling tears proclaim unheard plea,
lost in language, stolen from breath,
nought remaining but shattered scree.
Whitening world drains colours hues
sombre solace swiftly accrues
to scourge away your touch’s trace
an agenda rife with misuse.
Eyes escaping this shattered shore,
trapped in jailing mountainous hoar,
no kiss to melt morasses depths,
and heart is hewed for ever more.
Author notes
Option F
Edited : 29/11/07 ... Changed to improve flow ... syllables per line 8
A contest entry
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It's quite beautiful. and beautifully written. thank you for entering.
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A very well penned piece to complement the prompt chosen. Beautiful use of imagery and depth throughout. The rhyme and flow working wonderfully together. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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That was very interesting to the mind, and I liked it because it was beautifully obscure and brilliant in itself & its own beauty..... Good Luck in the contest!!!
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The AABA rhyme pattern suits this piece well, emphasizes the sorrow somewhat...I like it
Well done with the syllable count here, especially when you've used such rare and impactful words. An excellent write indeed dear. Thanks for sharing.
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Wifey
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And thank you for your help.
Hubby
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