Just once I wish you could love me enough
[pick me]
Just once I wish you could love me the same
[see me]
One time that's all I ask
[choose me]
One time that's all I need
[believe me]
Can't you
[hold me]
Can't you fight
[for me]
I wish you understood
[the why's]
I wish you listened for
[my cries]
You left me all alone
[with him]
You left me knowing
[of him]
Won't you
[why]
Won't you
[bye]
I wanted you to protect me
[his victim]
I prayed for you to rescue me
[his victim]
He remains "your" choice
[this predator]
He treasures "your" support
[our predator]
Never
[healer]
Never
[protector]
I wish I understood what I did
[to you]
I wish I understood the lack of love
[from you]
[mother]
Author notes
She makes his world comfortable (unimaginable) She stands beside him under the veil of God, (Unbelievable) She says," I can't care how it makes it makes you feel, (Unforgivable) I thought I was her little girl, (Unlovable)
True.......
A contest entry
- Make your pain mine... by Sticks-And-Stones.
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Thank you for the trophy! I'm just happy that you really liked reading something I wrote! Have a wonderful Holiday, remember take care of your heart this New Year!
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I have added this to the finalists list and I just wanted to tell you that this is great and I really loved this. I have felt this way many times before but never knew the words to put it into. thank you so much for this great write.
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Most intense! Wow!
Very creative this is
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I really liked how you wrote this piece the words inside the [thingys] was like whispers to me..
This is a really lovely piece
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Wow... this is incredible. I really like this poem and I'm glad I got the chance to read it! Great job!
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Thank you for seeing me, hearing and supporting me. Especially right!
Namaste' my Friends! -
wow This is an amazing piece. I am so sorry that you had to go through this it hits a place deep in my heart.
You have executed this so beautifully it comes across so raw and full of emotion, it is like a peek inside your head/heart.
I send my love to you and hope for all the best for your future and thank you for sharing something so intimate with us.
Falon
xx
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This is so sad I can relate to this in some ways thank you for sharing this with me.Goodluck to you in this contest.Best wishes always
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Wow that's really sad I'm sorry you went through that. Good luck in the contest. Check through this with spellcheck and for commonly confused words that sound the same but mean the wrong thing, like 'preyed'.
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