U
* are *
the star
* that shines
the brightest
throughout the night time sky of my universe *
the glistening twinkle that I espy first
when I stare into the galactic abyss
the eternal beacon that leads me
* guides me to calmer presence
eases my fears shares my tears
iconic symbol temperate idol *
single speck a sea of many
* mysterious * wonderment
you are my star
*
*
Author notes
"Shape Poetry" Combining Script into a form while maintaining the Artistic value of each.
A contest entry
- *~*~ Shape of Rythm ~*~* by Melissa Burns.
500 points, ended December 11, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shape of Impact by Gossamer Guile.
900 points, ended December 20, 2007, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hana Hou! by islekine.
600 points, ended December 27, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poem shapes & formats by Ringside.
550 points, ended February 7, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - everything and anything by x Bright Eyes x.
525 points, ended February 4, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Poetry by BellaD.
450 points, ended January 27, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - (= Prewrites!!!!! ENTER NOW!!!!!!!!! =) by xCandieKissesx.
525 points, ended May 19, 2008, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
An honest citique is well accepted
Comments
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BEAUTIFUL!!!! I love how you organized your poem. It's so amazing!!!!!! Great imagery and flow. STELLAR!!! Thanks for entering and good luck!
+ Jackie -
Beautifully done Cara
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FANTASTIC!!!
I have never been that good at figuring out this kind of thing, but you make it look awful easy!
This is amazing! Your words, your shape all of it!
Congrats on the trophys!! WEll deserved!!!!!
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Ahhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WOW.....OhRomeo!
I admit, I am impressed, and quite giddy from the spell you cast...I mean....wow.
Okay, I have to hand it to you, this is amazing. Sweet, Lovely, romantic, and charming.
I think I'munnna bookmark this baby
Beautiful.
jin
P.S. Yeah, Im still outta points, shoot me...a thousand applauses, and one encore!
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I like the format. Great job. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck.
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Never seen anything like this I love it.....
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Well done!
You have done a great job with this shaped poem. I have never attempted one myself. I especially like the lines:
the glistening twinkle that I espy first
when I stare into the galactic abyss
the eternal beacon that leads me
* guides me to calmer presence
Thank you for your entry.
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wow I love this... I can't wat to try something like this ...thanks for sharing
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Brother, sometimes reading you is like reading me.
You evoke emotions and maybe even memories.
Well done, my friend.
DEZ -
these aren't always easy to do, tried a half moon lately and gave up! I like the twinning of rhyme at the top of the two legs of the star
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This is great...thanks for entering...
Best wishes in the coming New Year!
Write on!
*PEACE* -
BRILLIANT WORK MARK!
Nice effort here Mark! You deserved the trophies by sharing this piece. The star is wonderful! Good work again!!
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Perfect. The word choice is wonderful here. I admire your bravery in trying this art. I cannot do shape poetry myself. Well done, and thank you for entering.
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Wow. You done good. I applaud you.
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One word sums this entire thing up...outstanding! Best of luck!
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I have read this before but couldn't comment then,
The shape , with its starry background is lovely as is its message "the eternal beacon"
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Very nicely done, and for a first time you have done very well. Good shape and message.
Dennis
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Nice job on this! I liked the shape you used. I've never written like that myself. Its definitely something I need to try sometime. You did a great job! I wish you the best of luck in the contests!
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this was really real done. great job.
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Wow, this was truly amazing. You did a fantastic job with putting this together. God bless you always and good luck to you in the contest.
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this was amazing
i loved this
the poem writen in a star how wonderful
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Wow
Your wife sent me here - she should get the due credit .. I'm glad I clicked on this one, and are you sure you are telling the truth? this is your first one in this form? *thinking* for it sure doesn't seem so... This is truly a wonderful poem and I love the form of a star ... of course this is about Cara you're talking about ...wow Mr & Mrs True Poet... Thank you so much for sharing your talent... good luck in the contest... take care Minoo
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Beautifully done for a beautiful lady. Kudos on the composition, thought, and for this gift to the love of your life,
Evan
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Lovely write
The words are beautiful and the style sets a great scene of the Star
Julie -
too cute
this is so cute love the star
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Thank you for entering my little contest! I hope that you had fun entering = I am having a blast judging this one!
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I Love Figurals!
HAving written so many before on another site, this star is the perfect meta[phor for your love for your wife. Loved the word usage and it is complimented quite simply by the black background and white lettering. Bravo for a wonderful entry! First time for this?? I'm awed!
The Healer! Hugs
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Who me Yeah right? Love Ya Babe. 
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Well for your first attempt at Concrete form it seems as you are a natural; you've mastered it. This piece flows well and the image is fantastic.
Love,
Amera♥
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