When like so often
You stretch out your hand
And take what is mine
Please be so kind as to give it back
Because when you take all from me
It might be all that I had
To rob me
And leave me naked
That is an abomination
A contest entry
- ANYTHING SHORT by Blooming Poet.
400 points, ended March 7, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I don't really like the intro lines, but I love the last sstanza, its very well said. To rob me And leave me naked That is an abomination
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Wow. This was a powerful piece. I have had people steal from me before. It is such a powerless feeling but you demanded respect. awesome poem. Keep writing.
Guin
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i agree. this piece is short but is powerful. the message is clear without going so much around the bush. thanks for sharing
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short but powerfull and no lingering on meaningless words just stright to the point its so good and the shortness made it so much more
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Truly,
we can all be stolen from in such a way as to be an abomination. To not be understood, or appreciated for our true selves is perhaps the greatest injustice that can be done by another.
You speak straight to the heart of the matter as always, and do a wonderful job of saying so much in so few of words.
PureCountry
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My dear this is very well penned poem that hits the bull's eye... no beating around the bush... when someone takes something from us, specially that involves emotions, that person generally takes it all we have and often hurts by not returning us back.. this poem has meaning different for each reader... good luck in the contest... I really like this poem.... take care Minoo
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Your words here leave me much to ponder upon. You have woven this in a fashion I would not have thought to do. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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I love how this gets straight to the point. No bullshit! I love it! LOL
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Your word is 'Abomination'
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