I dream some days
of different ways
of a world of cognition
where eye contact is not
a fatal competition
a duel
where making love
isn’t just fucking
and is not cruel
some place with no rule
where there is no right or wrong
where no one walks along
when they see corpses hung
where no one wants to stitch your lips
and rip out your tongue
but I live in a different reality
just chewing and praying on my fantasy
facing brutality
lacking originality
Following the instinct
is now just a crime
because the anguish
will eat you up
in time
we're screaming on the low
we're running from our shadow
it will follow us till the end
and we cannot defend
whether we do or don't comprehend
a smile is the best disguise
to hide the internal cries
though its a hypocrisy
it is mostly wise
this body is the soul's prison
it's torture chamber
it's poison
the knife its escape
it's attempt to reshape
everything that is pain
but every scrape
is another rape
the drugs its high
the only freedom
though it is all a lie
it refuses the hate
by being anorexic
the despair is lain thick
we "care" for our soul
but we've made it sick
and if only it could
to mom it would stick
no soul, no man, no god
can fight or overcome
this universal depression
this world wide aggression
the human oppression
no matter what is the impression
we're living in a world
in which we don’t survive
no matter how much the drive
no matter how hard we strive
in a world from which
no one comes out alive
A contest entry
- Make your pain mine... by Sticks-And-Stones.
650 points, ended December 3, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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true true true, and i soley agree.


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Wow... I really, really like this. I find it a bit odd you didn't capitalize anything, but of course that's your choice and I won't judge you on that. But the last line was my favorite, because it is kind of ironicly true. No one lives forever. Great job, and good luck!


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Oh my God. This poem is so fluid and profound. It has such great rythm and a rhyme that doesn't seem cliche or juvenile. I personally loved this one stanza
"no soul, no man, no god
can fight or overcome
this universal depression
this world wide aggression
the human oppression
no matter what is the impression"
Best of luck in the contest
#♥#emily#♥#



