My thoughts float towards you
as you drift away from my gentle touch
your floral existence, twist, turns
knowing my time may be short
Shorten by the distance of your rejection
I tremble
my loss is my selfishness
of thoughts of only you
my ignorance of failure
of knowing not your source of fertility
Can you forgive me
reach back to me
regress from the stream of doubt
that floats far from my heart
Author notes
I may not have captured the photo exactly but its all about the interpretation
A contest entry
- *Invite Only for a few of my Favs 2* by TwilightDazzles.
525 points, ended December 2, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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quite lovely.
congrats on the gold
Tasha
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WOW! I can see why this took the gold trophy, this well deserving of it. I love the beautiful wording of this piece, it's odd mix of beauty and saddness. Truly a brilliant piece.
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love the Boondock image. so cool. thank you so much, I really liked how it came out. appreciate the great words ~ peace ~ Mykeeee
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Brilliant! Sad & Beautiful!
I said to myself after reading this poem; "if this doesn't win Gold then, I have to read the one that did!" Beautiful, sad, melancholy, somber but sweet with regret and knowing what was lost. Loved this to the depths my friend. See...you are on my favorite's list for a reason. You captured the essence of the graphic art with skill, class, and ease.
Congratulations on that well deserved Gold Cup!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Thank U, thank U - my lovely friend!! I actually love how this came out and I am so proud that this conveyed the true thought I wanted. Love your thoughts as well.
God bless!!
Michael C............
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EXcellent DEEP Poetry!!
Very good interpretation . Your poetry is always deep. An Old Friend
"BOO"
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U know I replied to the wrong poem (damn). LOL!!! Thanks K. This was something I actually enjoyed writing. And I only get that every now and again.
Aaaaaaaaaaaah!! U scared me. Boo always gets me
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I'm glad this won the gold...it is true repentant love...pure and tender. Forgiveness should flow as easily as this did into my heart. A song of sorrow and hope, beauty in words Mykee...Peace, Rhonda
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O sweet Rhonda - how poetic are your words that understand what is laid before you. Thank you so much for the great comments. ~ peace Mykey
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Wow. This is very beautiful and I am pleased to see gold adorning this most emotionally charged write. Well done. Congratulations on your award. ~Pamela
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most beautifully written,
thank you for sharing
Tasha
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Thank U.
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Beautifully penned Son...Mom
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Thanks Mom.
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I believe the photo and the words from your pen
match perfectly. You have truly done an amazing job.
I'm not sure about anyone else, but I would forgive.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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thank so much. Just thoughts, but I'll save it when I need it ~ Mykeee
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Very true statement about interpretation. That's why I love this site so much, the wide difference between peoples' talents and the amazing points of view that are brought with them. Wonderful write, I *see* what you were conveying from the picture.
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Thank U - Ones eyes can not speak to whats in another's heart. Thanks for the kind words
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I think you have truly captured the photo. You have given it an essence that reaches out to the reader and makes them feel the words. Great job.
Soulful Woman
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Thank U, my friend. It felt good writing it
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"Regress from the stream of doubt" Now that's a great line.
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Thanks so much
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I thought you did it wonderfully
as if we sharing in your private confession of longing.
Each word carefully chosen filled with soulful air for
us to relate and enjoy.
Beautiful poet in you!!!
good good job dear poet!! good job!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
Seattle,WA.
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I am so flattered!! Thank U. I was a great feeling personally but I wondered if it really touched anyone else. ~ Thank U
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This felt sad to me of a love leaving, then of regret for letting her go.
Beautifully done.
~sugar~
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Thank you Sweetness!! sad and romantic. Thats me
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Indeed it is baby...
well interpreted I'd say....got me caught up in blissfull emotions while reading this piece so lovely written by you. As always I think you did a wonderful job with this prompt.
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Cherri
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Awwwwww, thank U Coco C....... I actually loved this one right after I wrote it.
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wonderful poem,
i think your interpreyation was awesome.
i think the word is loss not lost.
that was the only part of the poem that was confusing.
before i realised it was a contest it really felt
like you where writing to your love and asking her to forgive you.
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Thank U and thanks for that catch. I corrected it. It was cool. This was perfect for what i liked to write so it flowed great.
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It is absolutely all about interpretation!!! And in my opinion you did an excellent job with this prompt! I love that you really dug deep and pulled forth such a piece as this!!!
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Well thank you so much. I thought It went well with my personality. I'm glad you enjoyed it. ~ Mykeee
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you took me and asked of my gentle thoughts as you read your artistic to me i think you
did a great job on this
best wishes to you i give you my petals
keep them as luck
rose
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Thank U - I wanted people to feel an emotional
attachment or connection. and U have a good sense
of poetry - so I thank U I'll take those petals
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rose* my petals as promised with these petals that i freshly grew from the natural of my field
you my desire one will always speak in real splashes to me
your rose
AshleyK.
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BREATH TAKING
You have penned yet another Master Piece...The floating away of a love and leaving so much regrets...Longings and pain seems to flow from each line...Winner for sure!
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Thank U so much my friend. It was such a great photo that it made me sing this song of beauty. Bless U ~ Mykeee
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Beautiful
This poem is very romantic, but sad, the pic fits perfectly to me, the flower represents the woman, she floats away with the current, you regret letting her go or pushing her to that point, you have done an excellent job as always, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Thank U my Precious Song - You always see within the exterior words.
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Excellent Write
You rocked it! The words flow smooth like warmed honey and the thoughts melt over the soul. You captured the essence of unspoken love. In almost a quietude....you reach for understanding, to be forgiven. This is a master piece echoing love.....novy
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O thank you so much mom. This picture just sent me to another place. I just started writing after I saw it. Thanks again for you great understanding
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this is beautiful. best of luck to you in the contest.
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Thank U
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This is beautiful and sad all the same. It is all about the interpretation and yours was very creative. You definitely did me and the picture justice as I knew you would Thank you so much for entering, I love this! Best wishes
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Thank U - My pleasure
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