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waiting for him.

she held her cocaine cigarette
in the palm of her left hand
waiting for him to pick her up
& steal her away from the world

she wrote him countless letters
describing her fantasy driven dreams
praying as she kneels on her knees
causing her heart to skip a thousand beats

[baby; i'm waiting for you]
he could see the look in her eyes
a blue canvas mixed with
black & white

♥



imaginary crushes
inside her lucid mind

& yet she remains waiting

 

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.

.

 

while she wears her red velvet dress

[singing to the music of elvis]

 

 

 

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  • xNeonVertigoLipsx
    November 29, 2007
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    .i.love.your.uniqeness.

    You are wonderfull......i love your writing.......you are fucking awesome girl!!!!


  • broken daisies
    November 29, 2007
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    amazing

    this is really pretty
    the only part that sounds a bit awkward is when it says 'she kneels on her knees'
    i love that line
    but it's a bit like... well kneeling is on your knees
    but it's still awesome
    'a blue canvas mixed with
    black & white'
    that's my all time favorite line
    really really really really good


    • Garbage Candy
      November 29, 2007
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      that describes her praying as she is on her knees.

      and thank you ♥


      • broken daisies
        November 29, 2007
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        ok

        ok yeah i understood that
        just worded a little bit redundantly
        but it makes it beautiful so yeah
        xxx