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Desparaging Loneliness

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Within the confines of my mind
I drown in desperation to release myself
Icy waters penetrating  every fiber
as I swallow my life whole

Completely defeated by infinite desires
Fortuitous surroundings
disabling my trust , enabling my doubts
confusing reality in a misty haze

Shades of gray compliancy
encompassing the sky as I seek solace
in the darkness of my forever

 

 

 

 

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  • penman gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    Excellent

    Wonderful creation for the picture. So skillfully done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • quack silver member
    December 19, 2007
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    dark and sad auntie
    i love you
    love rhianna


  • CherryOnTop
    December 17, 2007
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    This is so full of emotion and intenisity."In the darkness of my forever" breathtaking.


  • quack silver member
    December 10, 2007
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    wow really good i love it and i love you


  • freespirit51
    December 10, 2007

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    An Amazing Write you have penned with your golden pen. It is truly an emotional write. The emotions fill my heart and touch the heart. Great write.


  • LadyShiva
    December 8, 2007

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    The imagery was simply amazing! This poem was full of potent emotions, I loved the word usage and flow as well...heck it was just a great poem...write on!!

    Lauren

  • darrylblacksr
    December 8, 2007

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    A well penned poem of loneliness,emotionally charged of life's emptiness. Well done my friend and I wish you the best in the comp. Thanks for sharing it with me...


  • Sandygram
    December 2, 2007

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    You have penned a wonderful poem with fantastic imagery of what true loneliness really is. It is something many readers can relate to. Thanks for sharing your heartfelt thoiughts. Great poem for the picture. Take care, Sandy


  • GoodKnightPoet
    December 1, 2007

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    I like this poem very much. You have written emotional words that truly depicts loneliness. You may enjoy my poem "Sitting in the Sad Cafe" http://allpoetry.com/poem/3645016


  • Denierim
    December 1, 2007

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    Great emotions in this one, and I love your choice of words for this one. I read this twice and I like the eerie feel to it... I don't know why that took over me but it just felt like a light poem filled with depth that no one can truly see. This one speaks so loud about the loneliness of a simple heart, and I adore the last line! ^_^

    Wonderful work with this one!

  • Rachel26
    November 30, 2007
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    nicely written...emotions are felt...keep up the good work

  • Bob Fox
    November 30, 2007

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    Abstractions

    And as the mind inflicts it's pain upon the body we search for peace never really understanding that we are just who we are. Defeated and over rated

  • Liquid memories
    November 30, 2007

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    awwww this sweeps me off of my feet, as you soar in depth of penning. loved the feel of this and the picture wrapped itself around your words. very good. success in this contest, it fels like a winner to me.


  • moluv10
    November 30, 2007

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    Beautiful! I love your take on the picture. You have such a deep soul and it shows through your writes. Great job! beat of luck in the contest.


  • Mykeee
    November 29, 2007

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    This was beautiful. Your words spoke beautifully with the the prompt. Such great words to this piece. Good luck Great spirit Mykeeee


  • Moodayo-Okohke silver member
    November 29, 2007

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    Your words touch this Warriors heart.There is a real sadness to them that brings the pain to the for front...I am here little one!

    ~YOUR WARRIOR~

    BLACK CROW


  • ennovy silver member
    November 29, 2007
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    Waiting to read this one dear poetess.....novy

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