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The Night I'll Never Forget

Her trembling hand touched mine,
As somehow by force,
Like I was sent to her,
And she was sent to me.
Our lips meant in a sweet passion,
As our bud flourished to a beautiful flower,
And we became so much more,
Because that night our bodies became intertwined as one.
We explored each other,
As if new to the territory,
Both hearts beating rhythmically,
N'sync with one another.

Candles glowed in the background as a shimmer as if far away,

Nothing really mattered but the look upon her face,

As our love was said through acts of passion,

Not of the love we were so use to seeing between a man and a woman,

But the love between two people of the same sex that we explored that night.

I still smell her sweet skin,

And taste of her bubble gum lips,

That night is a night,

I'll never forget!!!!

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  • livingItup
    June 25
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    wow
    such sweetness and such heart. it was beautiful. an i dont like it as much as you ^^


  • Dykerella
    June 7

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    Aww... Its so tender. I wish I could really understand. But...not yet hehe
    Its a very beautiful piece none the less


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    April 30, 2008

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    yeah this was a awsome poem u can write poetry really good u have the best talent I like it alot awsome this is one of my favorites but I like all of em' so I don't know hugs baby gurl


  • XxTattered WingsxX
    April 18, 2008

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    Wow, that sounds like a hell of a night. It would really be hard to forget a night like that. It was deep. Well written. I usually don't like blank verse poems, but yours always seem to capture me and refuse to let me free until I have finished reading. That only proves that you have a wonderful talent. I hope you have experienced more nights such as this. It much be great to experience such bliss.


  • sassylibra0074
    February 5, 2008

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    Awesome

    This was great, I love the imagary in this. Love is a BEAUTIFUL THING!!!!! Thanx for sharing and keep up the great work! xoxo


  • Galaxy2
    January 6, 2008

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    Tasty!

    Fantastic, honey, really fantastic!
    I liked the lines
    'As our buds flourished to a blissful flower'
    and
    'Nothing really mattered but the look on her face'
    and the sweet phrase
    'taste of her bubble gum lips'.
    ...A poem as tasty as the lips of your 'bubble gum love', sweetie!

    Galaxy2


  • lilith78
    December 30, 2007
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    Lovely writing here . . . very simple diction for a complex twist of feelings and emotions.


  • JustAnotherIdoit
    December 28, 2007
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    Thats so sweet. I love it. I could practally imagine it all, great write.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    December 20, 2007

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    I loved this!!!! wonderful job!!! keep up your good work!!!

    Crimson


  • pain is strength
    December 18, 2007

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    awwww.... this is sooo good...it is wonderfuly put together...
    and the way you passionatly talk about it..is just blisfully wonderful!!!
    keep it up.. this is the stuff that i
    love to read!!!


  • Decent Green
    December 15, 2007

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    Uh what? In Sync not boybang lameness. I did enjoy the two similes, though they were both calling out cliche. Hooray for girl on girl but this writing doesn't have any flow and lacks a lot of poetic qualities. Congrats on getting some.


  • Borntowriteforever
    December 10, 2007
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    its a wonderful and passionate write. beautifully written


  • Oktobere Sahnge
    December 8, 2007
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    Aww!

    So romantic! Mmmm bubble gum lips... *thinks dirty thougths* =]

  • Sam Is I
    December 5, 2007
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    i like it

  • Gott ist tot
    December 2, 2007
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    Passionate and romantic write
    Thanks for your comment


  • TheDeadMan
    November 29, 2007
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    awesoe write. great flow .

  • OurxBeginning
    November 28, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this one as well. I can really relate, the imagery in this was just right. I like that you're so simple in your writing, and the meaning is priceless. Great work, once again.


    • lesbian-in-love
      November 28, 2007
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      Well ok confession this has happened yet but it is how I picture it will go. I am glad you liked it.

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