I could try forever to tell you
But the words stick in my throat
It's like trying to sing the perfect song
But I just cannot strike the note
It's like eagerly spreading my wings
Only to find I'm not meant for flight
Like smiling all throughout the day
But to be all alone at night
Everytime I meet your eyes
My heart, it tries to scream
But you never see, you never say
For you don't know what you mean
And everytime I hear your name
My soul is on cloud nine
But it plummets back, down to earth
When I remember you're not mine
So I guess what I'm really trying to say...
Although my words are all askew
Is that everytime you walk away
I whisper, I love you.
Author notes
option3
Option 1, teenage love.
Age: 16
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such a breathtaking poem, i love the imagry (sp)
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wonderful rendition of loves hidden thoughts and expression of love despite circumstances separating it.
Good write thank your for entering and good luck in contest
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touching!
This one choked me up a little bit! Nicely penned, seemed sincere and honest. Strong ending. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck!
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Hey, thanks for the trophy, glad you liked it
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Awesome poem it has a great flow to it good luck
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Very pretty!!!
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beautifully written, not exactly what this option was supposed to be about but im not going to dq you for it. an amazing example of a secret admirer although i think the second you in line twelve was meant to be an I. an exqusite piece. thank you for entering and the best of luck.
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It was meant to be 'you'. It's like saying that he doesn't know what he means to me.
And if it's not ok for Option 1, it can always be option 4 =]
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Oh My God!
This is a perfect piece.... and i ould relate to this one 100%! Its just so hard to tell him how i feel straight to his face... coz i know its impossible for us to ever be together!
I love this so much... and your words were so relatable... i felt like this poem was written just for me! i could give you a million applauds if only possible! i love the simplicity of this and how you use amazing things and movements to relate how you feel... You have expressed your thoughts perfectly!
Thank you so much for this entry! wishing you all the best of luck in my contest!
Much love always,
Ranji
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Hey, thanks for your comment!
And yeah, it can be really hard to tell them.. but I guess if you don't you never know what could happen and it could be a risk worth taking. Ah well.
I'm glad you liked it, =]
Hannu xxx
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Wow! This really illustrates my love life... I wish you best of luck!!!
Vivien
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So I guess what I'm really trying to say...
Although my words are all askew
Is that everytime you walk away
I whisper, I love you.
Well this is also a very peculiar aspect of the life especially when you refer your love and it depicts the question and and it depicts the pain as well..The love is always dipped in the soil of the pain and tears as well, yet it is the most wanted sentiment and most desired wish of the every one..you did a wonderful job here..well done.. -
ty very much for entering this poem i love this write so much
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Hey I thought this was a beautiful piece of writing here. I don't know why in your profile you said you poems suck...This does not suck!
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liked the poem! keep on writing
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amazing poem
that really was awesome. it captured new meaning for wanting someone you can't have. you really have talent and I think you should keep writing. Becoz I want to read more. I hope you get through this tough time and I know that in time, u will do just that. -
oh wow...
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