Cold nights in graveyards leave me
Screaming through clenched fists.
When one more word could kill me
And you do everything to assist.
Gentle kisses on frozen lips
While you bury your blade and twist.
When you can see every lie that
You tell is bleeding from your wrists.
Will you cry for me?
As i have cried for you.
Will you die for me?
As I have died for you.
You gave up everything
And walked into the night.
But every tear that you cry
Won't ever make it right.
Cold nights in graveyards have you
Screaming at the thought.
Sober days wasted away
Have you wanting what you lost.
Cold kisses on frozen lips remind
You of the heavy cost.
Sober days wasted away
Show you the sorrow that you brought.
Will you cry for me?
As i have cried for you.
Will you die for me?
As I have died for you.
You gave up everything
And walked into the night.
But every tear that you cry
Won't ever make it right.
Through the imperfect cadence we cry
"What has become of our lives?"
Through the imperfect cadence we cry
"What has become of our lives?"
Cold nights in graveyards leave me
Screaming through clenched fists.
When one more word could kill me
And you do everything to assist.
Gentle kisses on frozen lips
While you bury your blade and twist.
When you can see every lie that
You tell is bleeding from your wrists.
Will you cry for me?
As i have cried for you.
Will you die for me?
As I have died for you.
You gave up everything
And walked into the night.
But every tear that you cry
Won't ever make it right.
You gave up everything
And walked into the night.
But every tear that you cry
Won't ever make it right.
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Comments
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Very good job with this write! Dark, vivid imagery throughout and very strong emotions invoked from this read. Nicely done!
bravo and thank you for entering
♥ kate -
wow. this is amazing... it's almost like it's a song, cuz of how the rhythm goes.. and it flows sooooo well.
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Thank you for sharing your favorite poem with me. Best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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AWESOME
i think everyone has been there at 1 point and it is deadly but so amazing and great but it goes away and everything becomes out of sight then it comes back again and its like a freaky rollercoaster ride but a great 1 that never ends but has twisted turns like rose vines twisted over a cold bloody black heart that makes it turn red i really liked the poem -
Awesome job! The imagery was vivid and very well done, and if put to music I think this would be a really amazing dark song, the cold nights in graveyards just leaves an eerie melody playing in my mind. Best of luck to you in the contest
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holy....
wow thats is one of the best one's i've read so far!!!! -
Wow
This is an extraordinary poem.
I can easily see it put to music, the repitition is great, really hammers the point across.
The imagery in this poem is fantastic, as is the flow and the rhythm.
I am in awe of your talent.
Well done
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It seems like it could be done to music. I don't know if you intended that or not, but in any case your write has left me stunned.
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Wow
This leaves me rather speechless. Amazing feeling, power, sadness, imagery,... Keep up the great work! -
intense write
Wow great write. The imagery was excellent and painted a sad picture. I enjoyed slowing down and really trying to soak in every bit of what you were saying.
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This was an enjoyable read. You painted a very vivid picture here.
Well done.
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This was by far one of the best poems i have read. I wish i could read it again for the first time. It really gripped me and had me sitting on the edge of my seat..literally. Fantastic flow and rythm, Superb write.
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the was a excellent write. The emotion just ran of the page and really grabbed the reader. Very impressive poem!
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WOW
This is an incredible piece, really. Gripping, intense, sad...I really like it -
great job
wow this was awesome the flow was great.it made bgreat sense and you picked your words perfect i mean perfect. this poem wanted me to keep reading it all the way through. this is a really great poem. thank you for letting us all read this beautiful piece. and keep on writeing these beautiful poems cause i will keep on reading them. thank you again.
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beautifuly writen. i enjoyed it emensly
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such sadness in a song. very nice imagery, i feel the haunting cold in this.
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I really really liked this!
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This was great
Great write
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