Seeing life straight through the glass
Looking in your eyes
Knowing truths that haunt the past
Hating every lie
Wanting peace beyond the rim
The tasteless salted shots
And needing hope promised by him
Yet drink away the cost
Losing mine, my sanity
One drink at a time
Hating hopeless vanity
Needing you to try
Giving up I see you now
For what you really are
Thanks for you’ve shown me how
To get myself this far
So now I find I’m moving on
On away from you
Finally free I am gone
You and I are through
Saving strength that I need
So I can feel alive
No drink nor blade, no longer bleed
Knowing I’ll survive
Author notes
Written November 28th
~Katie
[Partners Contest Entry]
A contest entry
- Best Of The Best by Partners In Crime.
725 points, ended October 18, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I remember it...I read it 10 month's ago
Good luck in the contest
XXJeannette
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Excellent
This is an excellent piece...I loved it. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Countrybabe
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Brilliant and such a positive ending. x
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You go girl. Dont let no man controle you!
best of luck!
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Having someone else in your life and right by yourside can be totally wonderful and bring out the fighting spirit
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awesome poem, i love it good luck in the contest
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Fantastic, the ending tied this poem all up because you came out as a fighter. I loved it.
Excellent piece
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We live and learn... and it seems our best teachers are the ones who break our hearts. This poem shows your survival skills and it looks like you've come through glowingly
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Wow, I love the way this one reads and the ending is very encouraging. Nicely done Best wishes in the contest
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Great poem, thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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"WOW" I can relate to this this is realy good so well written and the flow is so smooth and easy to read. yet the sadness is there.
Finally free I am gone
you and I are through
No drink nor blade,no longer bleed
Knowing I,ll survive.
A very efective ending
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No drink nor blade, no longer bleed
Knowing I’ll survive
holy crap nice line!!
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Good for you! I really like the title for this piece, and also that you end it with dignity and with hope. This piece is very beautiful and sad, and I definitely relate. Good job!
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A beauty in its sadness...
Wow...you really captured my thoughts with this write...I am afraid I can relate to some parts in this piece so much...
But although I have reached a point for moving on...every time I read sad poems like yours, things come back in flashes...
Surviving is one thing, but forgetting impossible...
Great write,
XXJeannette
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This is excellent, i love the rhyming, i think with each line it adds strength to the poem.
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wow!
powerful! i love this one!
i especilally like the lines
"No drink no blade, no longer bleed knowing I'll survive"
That is how i feel sometimes....somedays i don't feel alive.... but you need alot of strength to live.
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