I can't tell you
how much I love you
until I lose you.
And when I do lose you
I will die
on the inside
but will remember you
forever and ever.
I can't describe how much I love you.
How much I think of you
every night
and every day.
Every time you smile
I feel a smile on my face too.
When you laugh
at a joke I made
I feel so happy
and thankful too.
That I have a friend
like you.
But then I think
oh why
oh why
Why just a friend.
When we could be
so much more.
More.
I love you
like never before.
I get too scared
to tell you this
because what if
you don't love me back.
And what if
you just don't care
or you
just want to be friends.
It would hurt
no matter what you say
it would hurt.
It would ruin what we have.
Author notes
*R.I.P Destiny* Option 3 or 4
A contest entry
- I Love You... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended December 8, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Help me get through the rain by Jessi-As-Always.
875 points, ended February 23, 2008, 50 entries
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525 points, ended February 20, 2008, 82 entries
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Comments
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Beautiful absolutely amazing write!
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This is sad. I've been in this position except i can't say I know how you feel because they didn't pass..BUT i did make a stupid decision (no i didnt cheat) and he's gone forever. I've learned from past experiences that you need to just come out and say what you need to say before it's too late. we share this lesson in common.
Wonderful write
pixie -
Such deep and powerful emotion here!
Raw and expanding...
I love the beginning words...
"I can't tell you how much I love you until I lose you."
Those words are so true.
Expressively written.
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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'I get too scared
to tell you this
because what if
you don't love me back.'
a question which i think expresses most peoples greatest fears. great write [=
good luck in my contest [=
♥
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this is great!!
good luck in the contest!!
i'm impressed that someone of your age
can be so open about her feelings
wish i could have been that way!! -
This is a great poem! Good luck in the contest! I am also in the contest for Destiny, its really sad huh, its really hard to lose a friend and you did a great job of showing that in this poem! I think you have a great chance in the contest!
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This was a great poem. I've had the same feelings before...as I am sure we all have. I hope you share your true feelings with this person and you find what you are looking for.
Best of Luck,
~Jessi~
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just want to be friends.
It would hurt
no matter what you say
it would hurt.
It would ruin what we have
so true my friend revealing the secret strength of the love which can change the life and can bring the beauty in our life..you touched the
essence of this love as whole here..I love this piece..somehow it is a prayer of love..for love..and to love..a beautiful write I love this piece..well done...
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Wow what a wonderful piece!!!! How we have all had these feelings at one time or another... and how beautiful to put them in your writing...
Greatjob little sis -
I like the sentiments expressed, though, the opening lines that state "when I lose you" seems to negate the warm tender feelings that follow. You render the fear of loss well...I found this a youthful write somehow...best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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