Filling empty crevices in my heart,
With hate and pain that will tear me apart,
Leaving me with nothing,
Giving to you, all,
Alone again,
I fall,
Taking away my sorrows,
Flying with the wind, As my soul,
Maybe ,again, one day i can be whole.
A contest entry
- what exactly have you won? by black lagoon x.
420 points, ended December 22, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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So sad. Wow... Should have been ready for it though. It was a great write though, and one many people can relate to with ease. (Including myself) Anyway... I really liked the second stanza.
"Leaving me with nothing,
Giving to you, all
Alone again,
I fall,"
That part was amazing! AwEsOmE wRiTe! (I felt like using random caps. Lol)
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OMG
i'm the judge for the contest,and this is truly amazing.Thank you for submitting,yoou knew exactly what i was looking for!
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he.. I know that feeling. :'(
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ONCE AGAIN WRITTEN BY A POETIC PRODIGY!!
ANOTHER GREAT GREAT WRITE!!!, YOU REALLY HAVE A HUUGE TALENT IN WRITING! AND FULL OF SUCH GREAT EMOTION THAT IN A WAY I CAN FEEL WHAT WAS GOING THROUGH YOUR MIND AS YOU WROTE IT!!..GREAT!!
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Lonliness and heart-break was my first impression. I don't know if that's what you were going for. But, the way I see it, I can relate, my ex left me feeling empty, like I was missing a part of me. That's why I got that impression.
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awww! I love this one alot,it might be my fave but IDK
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