Silver dust shines
Bright like the morning light
Washing tears away
Icy wind blows
Through my clothes like death's hands
Making me feel numb
Tonight night comes
Crushing me with it's grasp
Dousing me with hate
Spring comes at last
Flowers poke through snows edge
Bathing me with light
A contest entry
- I Need Some Pick Me Ups by di ivers.
600 points, ended December 20, 2007, 18 entries
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I really like the stanza structure. Like short, long, short. It's consistent and I think it adds to the piece.
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i really enjoyed reading your poem thank you for entering and good luck...~~DI~~
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oooo I like Haikus and this one is no expection!!! Good job with this piece!
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Wonderful imagery! Excellent job on yourHakiu!! Brava!!
It seems you care little for winter either... oh, me... it looks great on Christmas Cards and still it makes me shiver... sigh...
Wishing you and yours a joyous Holiday Season
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nice ending. Great write
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great imagery!
you dont like winter do you?
lol.
nicely done. and you said you couldnt do haikus! PFFT. load of crap.
Abby
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