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[ Colour every which way, ]

Colour every which way,
Left, right, centre,
No monochrome,
Technicolor paradise,
Insatiable bliss,

Superlative inner magic,

Loving disposition,

Never dull,

Never dark,

A flower for the day,

Barbed wire daisy chains,

And candy coated dreams,

This is my life,

Interested?

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  • Jfd
    November 29, 2007

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    It seemed a little choppy to me, unless that was intended ( which I think it could be, from what I get from the poem).....you have interesting ideas..."candy coated dreams" didn't sit well with me....other than that, well done....thanks for entering!


  • quack silver member
    November 28, 2007
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    i like this its good


  • ForsakenAnimaForAng
    November 28, 2007

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    Hmm... It seemed like your being sardonic. It seemed not really happy. But rather choked on happy. Like your miserable within the supposed paradise. Really good though.


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 28, 2007

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    That is very interesting. I am speechless on this one. It was indeed very nicely done. Short and to the point.