The air tonight is cold and crisp,
as the wind doth lightly blow
From the chimney, the smoke a wisp,
and the rooftop white with snow
Stealing kisses in the doorway,
where the mistletoe is hung
Sweethearts snuggle closely,
as the carols olde are sung
We'll raise a glass to kith and kin,
to friends both near and far
And to the pair, turned from the inn,
and the babe beneath the star
Yet older ways we'll n'er forget,
for we burn the yule fires, still
The dark will wane with no regret
as the new sun peaks o'er the hill
Author notes
The last stanza refers to Winter Solstice, and the rebirth of the Sun
A contest entry
- TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 12,000) by cricketjeff.
1850 points, ended December 4, 2007, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyming Christmas poems by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended December 4, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Second Chance contest for Rhyming Xmas poems from previous contest. by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended December 7, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nicely rhythmical evocation of past times...well done and much appreciated.
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Congratulations on your trophy, a well deserved win.
We look forward to seeing you in the next round and subsequent rounds of our contest.
Thank you for your entry...Sue and Jeff
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Thanks you Sue and Jeff... I'm looking forward to it,
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I normally don't like ...
archaic English, but it works here. The punctuation needs work, but I do like the poem. You don't need the comma after fires, but you do need to look at the the rest of the punctuation. I also like the pic that's above your poem. It reminds me of the Santa in "The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe".
Thanks for entering, and Merry Xmas.
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ah, you of the bare shoulder in modesty, taking the soot of Christmas past and catching the spirit and respect in the yule so even Christ can show up at the event. sometime when the winds are warm and sun has melted winters thoughts I shall read the turn of spine from which the shoulder is a angel's wing.
Love, Tom B.
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This is a successful rhyming poet--reminds me of Question by May Swenson in that regard. I love it! Good luck in the contest!
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Always wonderful work you've
penned here. Great job and I love the picture.
Piff
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This is truly a wonderful couplet! The imagery is magic and the flow is like the winter fantasy it depicts. I love it and I love the old language, it brings to mind a true old fasion Christmas.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you, much
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Beautiful work here and I love
the imagery and emotion in it.
Well done and good luck to you
in this contest!
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Thank you, dear.
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