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to My Daughter

   

May you be as my mother
In her traditional dress
Her eyes full of concern for me
And my well being
Praying
May all my days be fine
Wishing
Me to be neither a king nor a clown
But human
Healthy in body and mind
In peace may I be
Yet always striving
Not with others but myself
Not fighting shy but following
God in life
May I believe what I know
And know what I believe
Knowing accompanying deeds
Sharing and caring
And learning the truth
Not of reason nor of logic but of love
And gathering
The strength and readiness to live
In the end
Leaving
To you little mother
A world worth living
So may I come once more
To be your son.
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  • chasingtheday gold member
    June 29
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    a good piece of poetry penned, sweet and smiling with love's light hearted way, but dancing too with powerful passion for family.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    May 5
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    Thank you for entering, it is a loving poem and I am sure you mothe loves this.


  • LadyLullaby gold member
    March 12
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    This is beautiful...

    A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.

    Kate

  • tears.of.silence
    March 11

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    very interesting poem... i like tihs a lot especially the way it kept a good story line. welcome to my family and thank you for entering the contest. Kahy

  • Madam.Brunette
    February 18

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    Very beautiful poem! Only problem is that this I'm hosting a background competition

    But very good work

    xx angel child

  • fatality-rhymed77
    February 12
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    It's a beautiful poem! I thought it was very heartfelt and sounded very sincere. Nice job!

  • moonsail silver member
    January 30
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    tHIS IS A VERY BEAUTIFUL POEM I LIKED IT VERY MUCH THANKS FOR ENTERING


  • Erozay
    January 26
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    its good i liked it


  • couldbeworse
    December 22, 2008
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    This is a beautiful poem! Very well written with alot of emotion. I'm feeling it definitely!


  • RareFlower
    December 15, 2008

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    words of beautiful wisdom

    Wonderful!, feelings of Hope and repect runs through this exquisite piece. Thankyou for sharing this.... I love it.
    Goodluck in the contest and best wishes for christmas
    love and light
    RareFlower

  • Going Forever
    December 6, 2008
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    WOW, this is great

  • My Souls Reflection gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    Very profound and wonderful poem that really touches the soul. I think 'Thoughts-Of-Soloman' summed it up nicely.

    Thanks for your entry!

    Annie


  • Ryno
    November 16, 2008
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    not feeling it
    ~prewrites, come and get them

  • -shiningstars-
    August 15, 2008
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    This is so great!!!! I love the way it ties in to faith. Masterpiece.
    ~shining
    good luck

  • HaleighGrace
    August 14, 2008
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    AAWWWWW--this is so nice--Thanks for entering and GL in my contest
    HALEIGH

  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    I read your words encompassed by a 'life cycle', offering up true meaning, in love and knowledge which go hand in hand. Also is seen, humility and awareness of discrimination regarding the difference of 'knowing about' and true understanding, which necessitates 'standing under'.

    May we walk in it well

    Sol


    • karabi
      June 11, 2008
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      Thought-of-Solomon

      Thanks a lot for your appreciative comments.

  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    Yes, love is the real mover of and into great things.
    A prayer for the best, in a particular way of awareness in a cycle of life. Born on the spring of the love for a particular daughter while also paying respectful gratitude towards the universal feminine qualities. Simple and good, Sol

    . Rewarded 6


  • Casey23Morgan
    April 21, 2008
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    very well done and very heartwarming.
    • karabi
      April 21, 2008
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      Solomon, Casey23Morgan

      Thank you my friends.

  • maa gold member
    April 2, 2008
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    I hear the voice of the native american wisdom here ... (I can't see your username, so, I am unable to verify yet) ... your verse has profound wisdom and speaks of love at the same time ... and of the cycle of reincarnation ... there is something very sacred I perceive in your words ... thank you so much for touching my heart ...

    maa


  • chills
    January 3, 2008

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    This was beautiful

    A very lovely wish to bestow on someone special. A daughter is very special - well, my daughter is so very special to me. Have three smiley claps


  • mysticstorm gold member
    December 19, 2007

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    Very well written. Profound and deeply thought provoking, which is always a wonderful read in my eyes...as for the person who says it has no poetic value due to lack of rhyme, should check up on poetry...for true poetry has many forms and is from the heart.
    Lovely work of love and metaphor.
    Best to you!


  • Sandygram silver member
    December 15, 2007

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    a wonderful and thoughful poem. Makes me ponder of my own past with my mom. Thank you for sharing. Take care Sandy
    • karabi
      December 15, 2007
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      Sandygram

      Thanks for reading and commenting.
  • Dobar Dan
    December 14, 2007

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    Great Heart Felt Story

    I had a little trouble wrapping my brain around this one - It could be made into a beautiful poem - I'm a rhymer so to me this "poem" lacks poetic value - the content is great - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe - Merry Christmas


  • grannyeri gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    Interesting way of writing this, and the way you bring the past to the presenet to the future through these lines. Very fitting for this season -


  • piccola gold member
    December 3, 2007

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    May I believe what I know
    And know what I believe .... very good lines. I think they may be profound.
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