Another villain for me to thwart,
Another day to save.
The thought of fleeing before the thought
That I will always cave.
These people walk on down the street
In ignorance; single file.
Indifferent to the fears I meet,
So is it all worthwhile?
I try to fix what people lack
I ask my unknown friends,
What will I be when all goes black,
And when the story ends?
I see the thoughts behind their looks
Although their looks are nice.
Just another name in the history books;
Another sacrifice.
Author notes
At first I wanted to write this because I wanted to explore the insecurities of 'heroes'. The first stanza is just about being tired of saving people who are unnapreciative. But by the second half of the poem I found myself in the mind of this hero pondering my mortality and knowing that even heroes are replacable and forgotten.
A contest entry
- Hit me with your best shot by De-Throned.
450 points, ended February 20, 2008, 33 entries
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Interesting write
Very well penned and heart felt piece .Often the ones we try to help and they push us away are those from within are afraid of this help .Some have never been shown such love and it freightens them and they disbelive it .Thus they shy away and remain within the dark
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you are really good at this. I enjoyed reading this one mainly because it is a thought provoking piece and i love reading work like that. Great job on the flow, it flows nicely and comes together quickly. Even though this is a short poems, it says a lot. You can say so many words in such a few short lines. I like this one keep it up.
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Great poem. It flows nice and tells a good story. My favorite part was:
I try to fix what people lack
I ask my unknown friends,
What will I be when all goes black,
And when the story ends?
Good luck in the contest -
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Though I like your poem, and it's good, all I'm thinking as I'm reading iis it going through the minds of the powerpuff girls, specifically bubbles. E_E
But beyond that, you accomplish the task well. The last two lines are my favorite. -
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Lmao! You must have some interesting things in your head..........
Sorry, it wasn't about the powerpuff girls, it was just about a hero in general. But I like your interpretation!!
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Thought provoking,
and nicely written. It reminds me that we are living towards the end, and in the end, what is left? What will we have left behind...how will we be remembered?
Lovely, soul searching write. Nice rhyme also.
Be Blessed,
Always,
Sassy
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Wonderful poem!
The last paragraph appeals to me most, it's great. -
Just a beautiful, thought provoking piece...
It's hard to believe you are so young. Your writing is just fantastic. I love the fluidic rhyme, and I love your explanation in the author notes. It amplified the pre-existing impact even further. I can definitely understand how any hero could feel unappreciative at any given point. I can imagine it would be just gut instinct to ponder my own mortality were I one of those heroes.
The important thing is that heroes do what they do because it's the right thing. There will always be those that won't take the time to be appreciative, and take those selfless acts of heroism for granted. By the same token, there are those who will cherish those same acts, knowing all too well the value of the sacrifices these heroes make for them. Excellent poem!! Bravo! Knight70
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Thankyou! Your comment is very flattering and i'm so happy it was so thought provoking. I also loved your poem so I'll be interested to see more of your work.
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I love your explaination in AN
but I managed to find meaning of my own,
and applied it to my own personal thoughts
and experiences.
This poem has so many possibilities
it was easy to do...
I love abstract writing,
it's like that song you hear
on the radio, that's a little
vague..but you're sure it was written
just for you..
I love this!!!
Excellent!
~Pastel
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