When you’re down or feeling blue
Remember I am there for you
You filled my heart with joy today
I want to fill yours the same way
They may say you're insipid trash
But you just have an identity clash
Just ignore their caustic word
I think all they say is absurd
When I think of times with you
I can’t stop giggling ‘bout what we do
"That was quite amusing" I had to say
After that fun filled day
You’ve made my belly ache with laughter
Even when I look back after
You give me joy I love you so
Remember this when you are low
You are endowed in the words you speak
I yearn to be with you cheek-to-cheek
You’re the one who gives me smiles
I would walk with you for miles
You are the pillar of my life
I only wish to be your wife
Please be happy but not for me
Be happy for yourself, that’s key
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Written October 25th, 2003
A contest entry
- October New Members- "Chin Up" Poetry Contest - Hosted by The AllPoetry Greeter Staff by CookieZeal.
300 points, ended November 3, 2003, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I definitely like this, and can relate to it all
I have gone on ooooooooone too many squeaking fits about the guy i like (i squeak when i'm very excited) and then those turn into giggles, and i can't stop smiling, and the "i would walk with you for miles" really stuck out cuz that's how I got to get to know the guy i like...and realized i liked him...I had to walk home from school for a change...then i ended up walking home with him, then i realized i liked him...then i walked home WILLINGLY the rest of the year
I really liked this, and i hope you do well in the challenge
kayla* -
made me smile
very sweet and innocent, if you don't mind me saying so...
I quite enjoy the simplicity of the love and hope you present.
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I like this - Love and lots of it contained here. Where there is love ther is always hope
Thank you for entering and good luck
Welcome to AP
~Von~ -
aw, this makes me smile . good one blond chick.
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well done, flows well,
good luck in the contest
peace be with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf -
awhhhhhh!!! What a wonderful difference the WORDS made! Yes. I know how it is.... and realize that you're new to AllPoetry, and that is why I said that if you just checked out the criteria, you could change and edit..hahaha.
Good for YOU!!! I realize you were just excited to comply with the theme. Many have done the same. Keep your eyes on the contest's requests, and I promise you've got a better chance!
Also, don't forget to go to other contests to make your chances greater! Search out the ones that appeal to you the most, and go for it!
Thank you for re-submitting! CookieZeal
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sorry I'm new at this and didn't quite understand. I added the words. please look at it again. thanks so much!
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A little fix here and a little fix there and you have a perfect poem for this contest!!! It's beautifulkl asitis but it is important to follow the rules too, and I really think with the rules intact...you might just place with this poem because it is really really good. Best of Luck and welcome to AP...
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Although this is a very good poem, please read the criteria for the contest, and try again. It _has to contain the list of words_ as WELL as the theme elements. I wish you the best. You can do this.
Thank you, CookieZeal
Edited on Oct 25, 4:35 p.m. because ''.
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