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I hope you never...

I hope you never say,
You weren't meant for me.
And that the love we have,
Just isn't meant to be.

I cherish every touch,
And linger in lustful stares.
In a room full of people,
You're the only one there.

I hope you never walk away,
Without my heart in your hand.
And tell me "It's the end,
I hope you understand."

It's hard to keep control,
When I've fallen so hard and fast.
I pray to Cupid "Keep us here",
I hope he'll help us last.

I hope you never decide to say,
You don't love me anymore.
Remember I was scared to love you,
I'd been hurt so many times before.

You asked me to promise you forever,
And held my trembling hands tight.
"Forget about scars of the past,
I promise I'll make them right."

I hope you never wake me from this dream,
I can't see me without you.
You've become my everything...
But can dreams really come true?

If they don't & I'm living a lie,
I hope I'll never see.
Cause it feels better than the truth,
When you lay here holding me.

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  • Lunatyx
    November 29, 2007

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    Magnificent

    I hope you never walk away,
    Without my heart in your hand.
    And tell me "It's the end,
    I hope you understand."

    I absoluitely love this part, it feels so real, so heartfelt. It isn`t easy to just write a love poem and make it sound true, but you did !
    Hope you win this contest without any discussion, although I pretty sure you will. I can`t really imagine a poem stronger than this one

    Beautiful write !

    x


  • warrior-eagle
    November 27, 2007

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    And held my trembling hands tight.
    "Forget about scars of the past,
    I promise I'll make them right."

    This was amazing.
    And I loved better that line about how if that is a lie you rather have the lie than the truth.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • Jalalbad gold member
    November 27, 2007
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    pretty

    I hope you luck in the contest. smile,
    Judy


  • Stride
    November 27, 2007

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    Ooh, lovely! I always appreciate coherent poetry. (MUCH unlike my own.) I was expecting to automatically dislike it, to be honest, because I almost never enjoy poems of this topic, but I really did enjoy it. Good to know a pessimist like me can still have a little faith in the world. And, for your sake and my own, I hope that your love never lets you go.