You think I didn't notice the cynicism in your words
The bitter stench made your mouth reek
And you tried to cover it with a awkward smile
You think I didn't notice the sarcasm in your voice
The sharp edge of your witty remarks
Dividing the heavy air into fragile molecules
You think I've been blind
To your tears, your frustrations, your guilt
How can I, when I have felt the same
You knew my distress and
At your minds high, the air molecules ready to burst
You wanted me to sign your treaty
I declined, not nicely and
What a mess that left on your ego
To consider that you ever thought highly of me
But the blast knocked us both of your pedestal
And now that you sarcastic words are weighing heavy
There is nobody to save you from yourself
Author notes
I wrote is poem a while back about a colleague of mine. She talked down on others who in her eyes were less then her and she wanted me to do the same and i declined not so nicely. Hope the poem is clear. Comments and critiques welcome
Sorry cannot think of an embarrasing moment, but i read your rules
A contest entry
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Judge's Verdict.
I think that this is a well written poem.. Though there are a few places in the last stanza where you left out some letters (lol). Good job -
very good job. Love the ending. You've penned a great story here. Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Kahy
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Brutally Fantastic.
What a solid "kiss off" done in a classy way!
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Oh, this is a nice poem with a very clear and powerful message...you have shown your majesty through your words beautifully...the starting lines are as good as the ending lines...very well done...thank you
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i like it, its snappy. the firtst three stanza's are really strong, and got my attention right away. its has a clarity that i can definatly relate to, and a good spirit.
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Well done
Love the poem!! The ending is brilliant and wity... Well done!
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oooohhh give them some attitude back lol. well done you!
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i like this a lot. i hate people that do that. i work with a woman like that.
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Like it.
Well written, like it.
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