Let's go dance in the town’s main square,
let's pretend we live in a magic land,
it is for us the soft accordion music in the air.
Dressed in fine silks, hand holding hand,
garlands of flowers decorating my hair,
our eyes full of golden rays, love's glare.
I gave you my heart, you gave me your heart,
I don't remember when it was the first time.
If we must read it, then when do we start
when years looks like it was only yesterday?
Each day of ours has its special meaning and the sound of life.
Like wax drops falling into water create unique art,
our touches are forever leaving unique signets of unbroken bond,
for only real love knows how to marry man and woman.
So close we are, shared beats are the only place between our hearts,
we find the warmth of words even though none is spoken,
place and time don't matter, with just a single regard
we share our feelings and our eternal love's token.
Author notes
Option: Finding the love of your life.
In a list
A contest entry
- One Year Anniversary by aboomer.
600 points, ended January 16, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Happily Ever After by Unstoppable.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Celebration by Jamaica.
300 points, ended January 25, 2008, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Let me share my feelings with you
I enjoy the fact you controled my emotions with your words and kinda confused my mind leaving it filled with love. It is something like revese phycology maybe in another poem you can use it to control thoughts like what you did. And the main thought in my mind was o boy what a great poet...
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Beautiful
"shared beats are the only place between our hearts"
That is a lovely line- though I might have used the word 'space'instead of 'place'- but then that could change the meaning of the line a bit- depending on how you meant it- No matter how you look at it- this is a lovely poem. The feelings and intensity of true love really pulse throughout the piece and I think it has a very nice flow.
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This is truly lovely. Beautiful wording, great depth and emotion. And definitely, true love I'd quess. Read nicely. I liked all of the wording, but especially,
'Like wax drops falling into water create unique art,
our touches are forever leaving unique signets of unbroken bond,'
thank you for this entry.
best wishes.
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"for only real love knows how to marry man and woman.
So close we are, shared beats are the only place between our hearts,"
this is SO beautiful, so true, I love the rhyme in this, i love the opening stanza, like a song, and then a dance to it below...sighs, I love this!
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Marvelous
Each day of ours has its special meaning and the sound of life.
Like wax drops falling into water create unique art,
our touches are forever leaving unique signets of unbroken bond,
for only real love knows how to marry man and woman.
So close we are, shared beats are the only place between our hearts,
we find the warmth of words even though none is spoken,
place and time don't matter, with just a single regard
we share our feelings and our eternal love's token.
I really love this poem it is beautiful and I can really relate to this poem u did marvelous job. ALsome job way to go beautiful job. Keep up the marvelous work. Loved reading it. your words well expressed true meaning of love throughout this entire poem just just bravo..
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Outstanding
Iloved this poem. You talk about a deep affection that has stood the test of time and grown stronger. This is something many people can only dream about. This poem is fluid with a great flow and universal message. A well-written, sophisticated poem.
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A beautiful heartfelt write. Good imagery, flow and tone. Nice rhyme. Lovely depth of feeling. Your love shines bright in this piece. Good word choice. Nice alliteration, assonance and simile. Congratulations on your anniversary.
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Sonja, this is so beautiful! What a special love you have to have written such lovely and loving words. Your poem is a beautiful read and touched my heart. My husband and I just celebrated our 45th. Anniversary on November 23. It hardly seems possible that so many years have passed and that we have lived all the places we have and raised 4 children. It's true that love grows with the passing years....you have much to look forward to.
Carolyn
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oh your love is so pure! this poem captures the magic of your true love. i absolutely LOVE the first stanza!
LXF
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THIS IS SO TENDER AND EVER SO SWEET!!!!
This is the very thing that true love is made of.
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Your first stanza is like a carnival, a holiday, a celebration. The love you describe is beautiful, timeless, how true that it was only yesterday and also decades ago! This is warm and knowing, well done.
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"place and time don't matter"... that is so true, Sonja... even across time and sand real love will and can survive and thrive. I loved the lyrical quality of the first rhyming stanza - lovely. You are really singing love's song straight from the heart - and it shows... such a feeling of weightlesness about your words... up on cloud no. 9. So good to read love like this!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you dear Nicolette. The first stanza is written this ways with a purpose, to capture a moment and I am so glad that you like it. The rest are written above the cloud number nine.
~Sonja~
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