As I sit here and hold your hand I go back to the day I met you.
Someone I thought was so perfect and I was as unperfect as you can get.
As I sit here and hold your hand as we take our vows I go back.
You gave me your time.
Time that I believed I wasn't worth.
So as I hold your hand today I thank you for your time.
As for tonight I will give you all the time in the world.
Author notes
I wrote this as I was reading my boyfriend's emails. At times I believe we all wanted someone's time. I got his and he will get mine in return, as will anyone that I grow close to or whoever needs to talk.
A contest entry
- Wedding Vows. by Expression.
525 points, ended February 14, 2008, 15 entries
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This is so beautiful
it really touched me.
Great work!
~Pastel
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Very nice work here
Yes so often we take time for grated until something goes wrong then we can see just how much time and love we spent together and wasted unknowingly
never waste a minute for time is the most preciouse item in this entire world
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Aww...this beautiful...I pray that you will know just how much you are worth...
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this is beautiful and yes ur right,we all want someone's time. thank you for entering
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touching
that was a really touching write- i really love it! It is true that we always crave for time from our loved ones and i think that you did a marvelous job in describing the strong link between the two of you.
Great job, keep it up!
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Loved it
I like this lil sis...
I could put this in a card and send it to my wife...I am throughly impressed with your name as well...
Keep up the good work...
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hmmm i like it. Its short but really gets you thinking about what time really means. i really like the part
"You gave me your time.
Time that I believed I wasn't worth.
So as I hold your hand today I thank you for your time.
As for tonight I will give you all the time in the world." I love it! ^_^
hearts and hugs
wolfheart
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Very nice poem! I love how it all ties in together and doesn't wander off. Very enjoyable read because of it
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I think you should do a little work on the structure- if you're going to write a free write, make sure there's a rhythm of sorts to make up for the lack of rhyme. It makes the poem easier to read, that's all.
Otherwise, it had a sort of cute quality. That feeling of lingering inadaquateness...even though they don't seem to agree with it.
It sort of makes you feel special, that they chose you even though you think they could do so much better. -
aww i really like this poem. i think it's really sweet and i too love getting my boyfriend's time.
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Nice
This is an easy read.Could be your wedding vows.
Liked it.
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Very nice write
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