When you look toward me
your eyes rejoice
reminding me of love
Revealing your beauty
with only a smile
and an outstretched arm
Meeting with a soft embrace
Your body against mine
Eternity here would be idyllic
Head tilting into my vision
Strands of hair brushing your shoulder
May this be the vision I wake to see
The lack of an experience
Emptiness keeping me awake
Transforming a blank page
Perhaps the words
will create a vision
or this vision
will only create more words
Author notes
I wanted to write a love poem but it turned into an unrequainted love poem. I guess that's becuase I'm not in love.
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nice poem
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Well, for not being in love and writing a poem such as this, it is incredible. I really felt the depth and loving attributes for this write. Just reading it gave me a feel of serenity... and yet the words have not been written just yet because there are no words to say... But when the time comes, they will flourish onto the page.
Beautiful write.
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Lol on your author's notes. I have that problem too. Can't write a completely sappy love poem without getting sad in the end. Thanks for entering.
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either way it's well written. Nice write. I often wonder if the words are what give me longing, or my longing that creates the words.
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