Starkest beauty of winter's bare wings,
as past boasts honed breasts of summer blooms.
While in her mind spring zephyrs sing.
Life's wisdom born on fragile strings,
with beating thoughts of bygone grooms.
Starkest beauty of winter's bare wings.
Mellow tones and floral summer rings,
locked forever in autumnal rooms.
While in her mind spring zephyrs sing.
Thimble dreams and esteem stings
for faltered lay her garden's plume,
starkest beauty of winter's bare wings.
Passive moments of seasonal clings,
as vacuous thoughts go past cyclic dooms.
While in her mind spring zephyrs sing.
Blossoms lay whithering in leaf's ting
wishing again for season's moon.
Starkest beauty of winter's bare wings,
while in her mind spring zephyrs sing.
Author notes
Asfand And dark whispers helped immensely seductive i believe is still in hospital ... so am sending her prayers... peace and love... desi(group leader)
http://shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html this is the link to all the forms of poetry, our challenge was to do a villanelle...which has a definite rhyme scheme... it was especially challenging for my poor teammates neither of which were big on rhyme... and it was a challenge for me because i hate to be confined to a form... LOL.... i enjoyed working with my collab partners and i hope they enjoyed working with me... peace everyone...desi...PS... it has been suggested by Arkbear and Brother K that we edit our punctuation... unfortunately my teammates are extremely busy at this time and i suck suck suck at punctuation so 'bear suggested i let you guys know here .... this was an equal challenge for all of us...we never let egos or anything get in the way of what we were trying to accomplish... i would adore collabing with these poets again! .... peace and harmony folks... desi
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GUYS!!! This is great! I love it. I think you guys worked very well together... You all gave what it takes to make it in this round, and that deserves a
and some claps!! lol. I must say that the color you chose for the words is a bit difficult to read on this busy lil background... Not horrible, but could use a bit of relief. Your wording was solid, and well chosen. GREAT WORK@@ I am so glad you decided to keep the beginning lines 
They were of course my favy!!!
Nice teamwork!
Mel
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Very nice girls!
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In the past I've had to do group writes such as this in challenges, and I know how difficult and frustrating it can be...but also how rewarding it is when the end result is something like this, incredibly beautiful and well put together. Punctuation aside, you've done a wonderful job.
Good luck and best wishes to you all,
~J.
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Hats Of To Both Of You!
Thank god, I think this came out wonderfully Desi! I found myself two excellent poets and wonderful, supportive friends!
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Congratulations to the three of you! Best wishes to Seductive as well. You three have worked so well together to pen a piece so marvelous and breath taking, and absolutely stunning piece. I agree with both Bear and Ktulu on this - the punctuation would have helped a bit but your words reign of beauty. Lovely job to you all! Keep up the good work.
Always and Forever,
Kristen ♥
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Well let me start by saying that this is undoubtedly a beautiful write. You three have worked very well together and the end result is this magnificent piece of work.
Your punctuation seems to be a bit offset though, as in my own opinion. (Meaning that I would have done it differently)
BTW, should "borne" have an e on the end?
Also, props to you for not forgetting Jen.
A job well done!
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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Firstly.............
.........in your AN, you need to place a Link to your Form and description of it as well ~
Secondly.....I am in awe of how well you three pulled this off ~
I do believe there could have been some punctuation to slow the Reader down a bit, so that we could grasp all of the beauty you have displayed within each Stanza ~
This is such a Sensual write, and indeed worthy of applause for taking the time to gather your thoughts.......communicate.......and bring forth a Theme which has Imagery.....Emtion....Impact....and most of all.....Likeability ~
You all worked well as a Team.....and thank you Desi for remembering SW ~
Have you really looked at how beautiful these words are?
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~~~~ Starkest beauty of winter's bare wings,
as past boasts honed breasts of summer blooms.Life's wisdom borne on fragile strings
with beating thoughts of bygone grooms.Mellow tones and floral summer rings
locked forever in autumnal rooms.Thimble dreams and esteem stings
for faltered lay her garden's plume,Passive moments of seasonal clings
as vacuous thoughts go past cyclic dooms.Blossoms lay whithering in leaf's ting
wishing again for season's moon. ~~~~~~Good luck Ladies,
Bear ~
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*Good luck Ladies*
--> And GUY
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