As the apple falls into the well of sadness,
overflowing from the multitude
of pointless tears, shed over a callous soul
Heart flutters like leaves to cold autumn winds,
fleeing the emptiness that remains
in this ravaged core
The pain still echoes behind
these hollow and battle scarred eyes
Callow exuberance and infatuation,
the foundation of the foolish ideal
that my love was in safe hands
My naive and perpetual trust
cast aside just as simply as useless words
into a sea of neglect
With serenity just a dream away
I let my poison pill slip from grasp
and follow the loving glow
reaching out from beyond the darkness.
Author notes
Inspired by Picture C: "Poisoned Kisses" by Liliana Sanches.
A contest entry
- Another Sad Contest!!! {{Picture & Song Quote Inspired}} by PerfectImperfection.
685 points, ended December 12, 2007, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prompt Prewrites Welcome, But stay on subject by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended March 5, 2008, 12 entries
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pain
it was painful to read..
but I loved it all the same
mmm
I feel the burning of tears behind my eyes
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Good Write
Another sad love story LOL. Best to you in the contest -
This is a beautiful take on the prompt. Very well penned, with such a great sadness woven within, leaving the light on for hope to soon follow. There are so many wonderful lines that stood out to me, I cannot outline a favorite here. Thank you for your entry!
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WOW
This is perfect, Cuz...So sad and realistic while beautifully written in your usual brilliant style...Love the lines:
"Callow exuberance and infatuation,
the foundation of the foolish ideal
that my love was in safe hands"
I can feel the chill...
Gorgeous
Lynda
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wow great write ....awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee good luck
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My naive and perpetual trust
cast aside just as simply as useless words
into a sea of neglect
WOW, you really penned one that spoke to me. love this poem, and the imagery. BEAUTIFUL STUNNING and wow! best to you in the contest! ~blessings always~
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