Women gods’ greatest creation and giver of life
She is a source of pleasures and inspiration.
She is the one, who crams every temptation,
She in her has the fusion and the fashion.
Her heart has the depth of the ocean,
She is with you her family in life’s every motion,
She has in her love, care and emotion,
She tells you, when to take precaution.
Women...
Some buddy calls her a flower for her beauty,
Some buddy calls her a lover for her love,
Some buddy calls her a moon for her elegance,
Some buddy calls her candy, when she crosses a age.
World wide she is admired because of her beauty,
For her body and not for her heart and humanity.
But she is much more than that,
She is not just a women but is,
A mother, a sister, a wife, daughter,
A friend and is a grand mother.
But more than that she is a human just like the man
Who thinks she is just a soft drink can
With her fizzzzzz she is the best
And later on just put her to test
A contract of eternal bond of love confirmed by mutual joinder of hands,
She is more beautiful gift to a man than the earth's sand's,
She will do what ever to a man she can,
But to her is not always is greatful is a man.
After everything that she has done for the world and man
They will always ask “Is a woman complete without a man"?
A contest entry
- The X Chromosome (700 POINTS) by Shahrazad.
700 points, ended December 6, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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its really nice i would agree with shahrazad and its really nice and you have rectified the mistake and i feel this is a a life of every woman in the world of the male dominated society but now its many people are feeling things are equal and its nice its very touchy to read something like this and its really in deapth if i was the jurdge i would have given you gold
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You had a lot of really good thoughts in here, and I loved that. I felt that the beginning was very strong and it really lures the reader in- so kudos to you for that. There were 2 tiny tiny grammar errors in the poem that I noticed- I won't count them against you or anything though because they were very small and everyone makes mistakes- however, you forgot a question mark and astericks at the very end of the poem- small and nitpicky, I know- but it really changes the meaning of the last line. Good job! Thanks for entering this in the contest!
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