the room is a blue stone
of refracted light
we move easily
through
it is cool
and soothing
comfortable here
we dream, remembering
in a dark womb
well before eyes,
the heart beats
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What I find about your poetry is that you are subtle with almost hidden messages. If one didn't read it right they would miss the whole point. Now that, to me, makes a damn good poem. From you there are many of them.
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The most perfect of words interwoven ..they breathe
rhythmic ..unending wrapped in blue
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such poetry leaves me without adequate words to compliment...
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Wow Just awesome!
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While our dreams haunt our thoughts and dim over time
somehow they can be captured in few but written rhymes
Wonderful
(Cathcing up on the ones I have not read yet)
~Carlie
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dreams found past an echo where memories rise ino the distance.
Yes I hear this clearly!
Bill
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Love this title
Your titles always seem to draw me in and then I never expect what I read from the title.
You have a calming way about you.
Warms the soul
Becky
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Excellent write
Brilliant, I almost felt the comfort myself
from your words.
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Inspiring!
This made me think what a fetuses dreams must be like, how pure and untainted by life, an absolute representaion of human creativity. I really love the last bit.
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thanks
a fetuses' dreams... stay away from the brown acid bro...LOL
i appreciate those comments, really :
al
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Still amazed everytime I savor and linger on your masterful words....simply pierces my heart, the subtleness of your soulful sentences....
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Well before eyes,
The heart beats
I love it AJ... Beautiful
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this is something to let sink in and ponder
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and before the heart beats, nothing.
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i love the mention of 'we'
i am just taken to moments with Paul in this...
the moment of unconditonal love
just where i went....
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This is a beautiful write with good use of metaphors. The last line made me think of the first moments of life. So very true that the heart beats before the eyes open. Keep writing.
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You are so good at this thing called poetry and I simply admire your ability to write in such a subtle and understated way, yet still say and show the reader so much.
This is wonderful poetry, Al - all the shades of a day. I don't keep a diary, but each poem is a diary, isn't it? Beautiful.
~ Nicolette
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forgot these
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My diary entries are so dull in imagery compared to this... lol. ("I went to the store..read a book... had a weird dream, etc."
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Beautifully done.
I love the first line.
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do you understand how good you are at this?
this piece is so subtle and laid so perfectly on the page- it speaks to my heart
on the most primal level- the
greys indeed- the sightless
heart still beats-
the concept of the poem is fantastic- just one of my favorites by you- and don't get me started on the title..
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gorgeous Al... simply gorgeous
the deep well of knowing and ability to show light and touch
sigh
Gill.x
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