dont touch me
just go away
give me that back
i wanna feel
what it can give
i wanna feel
life slip away
i want freedom
dont touch me
dont even try
dont smile at me
not even that
just give me a chance
to fulfil my dream
of being so free
to live free
or not to live at all
Author notes
depression .... i am one who not only suffers from a mental illness but also other complications. including depression, ADHD, and a tough life.
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Do you ever have some one that just wants to help when you dont want any one there?
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I can feel the emotions here.
Marvelous job with this write.
Bravo
♥ Kate -
Wow, it's an amazing write, I love it! Very inspirational good luck! ^_^
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Ooo
Gave me goosebumps, this one did
I find this poem very interesting for some reason. I have never seen words arranged like this, using emotions like I've never seen them used...
"dont touch me
dont even try
dont smile at me
not even that "
A wonderful example of depression. Raw and powerful.
Keep writing
thanks for entering, and good luck
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It's alright. I've been there, too.
I liked this write.
Beautiful.
Thanks so much for entering.
sarah ~
p.s. sorry it took me forever to comment -_-
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Depression
Is not a mental illness sweetie. Only a chemical embalance caused by stress and other things in life. I suffer from it myself.
I myself refuse to give you the blade back. =]
Wonderful write.
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A terrifying read, in an oh so good way!
I really liked the intensity of this.
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Holy crap this is intense and yet so real. Tell me this is freedom and your life slipping away really the same thing? I mean you don't really know what happens we your life is gone...What if it's not freedom at all but what you find is something much worse then the life you once lived? Just a thought
This is an amazing write and I really enjoyed reading it! Thank you so much for the entry and good luck!
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Painful and poignant and penned with honest emotion. Best of luck in my contest.
D.M.
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What can i say, very sad, truly painful words my dear, i hope time will heal your scars
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OOOOO
Thats Good... emotion, and I like the style
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