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Behind The Passion - Sonnet

 

With soft and gentle words of love you speak,

Love for you in my heart, shall always live.

Here deep within your soul, true love I seek,

To you, my loving heart I’ll gladly give.

 

Just one small, single kiss from your sweet lips,

My hand rests, upon your strong golden hips.

Soft and tenderly, you hold me so near,

The height of your desire becomes clear.

 

Soft, silky lips, survey all that is mine,

To your manly touch, my buds do flower.

Upon them, your lovers lips devours,

As slowly, our hungry souls entwine.

 

Heated passion ends, our bodies spent,

Sleep to newly joined lovers, now descent.

 

 

Author notes

 

FOR MY HETANE BLACK CROW.. YOUR WORDS THE INSPIRATION, BEHIND THE PASSION...LOVE TO YOU

 

 

PUSHKIN SONNET

Each line carries a ten syllable count.

Octave rhymes- abab....ccdd..

first quatrain in alternating rhyme, and the second in two couplets. The sestet can use either two tercets ..eff..egg....or

alternatively the same rhyme is used, this time as an envelope quatrain with a cuplet...effe....gg.

 

This is my own background ..Please credit if you Snag.

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    I struggle lots with form poetry, well done for achieving this! I loved the sentiment and your words are so true, I have these feelings for a special man too!


  • Austere
    February 5, 2008

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    great write. It is one of sensuality without being blatantly about sex. This speaks of love and desires rather than plain lust. Good write, poet.


    • freespirit51
      February 5, 2008
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      Darkness Wolf

      Thanks for your very kind words. I am so glad this piece touched you even if only in a small way. I only wish My Hetane was still alive to hear your kind words.


  • Megan Awesome
    December 7, 2007

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    Wow, this is really passionate and beautiful. The last two lines I think would deffinately have to be my favorite. Love between two people who feel so strongly is always beautiful. Very poetically written. On a scale of one to ten I'd give it a 10. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
    Megan

    • freespirit51
      December 7, 2007
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      Mommas Fallen Angel

      Thanks for your generous words my friend. I had great inspiration in writing this poem. So glad you enjoyed it.


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    9pts...

    Thank you for contributing this piece to The Poetic Bandits reading list, and congratulations on the HM

    ~Lilac


  • Amera gold member
    December 3, 2007

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    What better way to state love than in a sonnet. This is beautiful. I love your work!

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • freespirit51
      December 3, 2007

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      Amera

      I am pleased you enjoyed your poems. I have only recently started writting sonnets so the form is still new to me. I hope to work on it more and get better as I go. Thanks again and have a Happy Birthday.


  • Brazos silver member
    December 2, 2007

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    Beatiful Sonnet

    And, it carries with it a wonderful message of love as well! So smooth and liquid, it almost dripped off the page and into my heart.

    Thanks so much for entering our contest.

    Brazos

    • freespirit51
      December 2, 2007
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      Brazos

      Thanks so much for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope it touched you. My inspiration deserves much credit.


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    December 2, 2007

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    The poem is beautiful though I think you lost me in the description of the type of sonnet with the quatrains and rhyme scheme.

    • freespirit51
      December 2, 2007
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      Lady Altheia

      athanks for your kind comment. It is not so important on how it was written. It is what is written that is important. glad you enjoyed.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 1, 2007

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    The background is beautifully suited to this poem... and the poem itself blew me away... you have used this form to your definite advantage and created a masterpiece ... I'm sure the person you wrote it about loves it too!

    Keep writing

    Polly

    • freespirit51
      December 1, 2007
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      Polaja

      My inspiration Moodayo-Okohke said he loved it. He enjoyes being my inspiration for words of love. Thanks so much for your kind words.


  • TallStory
    December 1, 2007
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    Im commenting a lot .
    Good poem.


  • Dark Energy
    November 30, 2007

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    Prefect Pushkin!

    This poem is written very well and is structured as needed. This is very good. I am proud that you have done such a good job. All the sonnet elements are here. BRAVO!


  • HeavenScent4U
    November 30, 2007

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    I don't know much about actually writing sonnets but I know what I like This is so full of love and passion and very nicely done. I love the background, very fitting for the poem Good luck in your contests. Be well and be blessed


    • freespirit51
      November 30, 2007
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      Dark Energy

      Thanks for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed it. I sure enjoyed writing it.


    • freespirit51
      November 30, 2007
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      HeavenScent4U

      Thanks for your kind words. I am still learning about writing them myself my friend.


  • Whitemaiden
    November 28, 2007

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    I have to say I really like this particular sonnet. Especially with the different combination of rhyming styles. Also, when I read "love" poems I find them to be in bad taste, but I was pleasantly surprised with this one. Good job.

    ~ Whitemaiden
    ~ ~


    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      Whitemaiden

      Thanks so much for your very touching comment. I am so glad you enjoyed it. I try to with good taste not smut.


  • raggyann
    November 28, 2007

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    the back ground was beautiful and your words spoke volumes
    this was a beautiful poem and your flow was great

    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      raggyann

      thanks for your beautiful words. i am glad you enjoyed my poem. Glad you enjoyed my background I designed just for this piece.


  • kaitlyn-love
    November 28, 2007
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    This is so sweet, it just says so much about love. Beautiful and intense.

    Kaitlyn


    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      Kaitlyn-luvsdorks

      Thanks for your sweet words I am glad it touched your heart.


  • emotionalysecretive
    November 28, 2007

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    wonderful, beautiful. i loved this poem, it was really sweet, and i could just FEEL your emotions. great write!

    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      enotionalysecretive

      Thank you, thank you, for your very kind words. Gald it touched you. It was a very emotional write for me as well. Thanks again.


  • tlsledge
    November 28, 2007
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    Beautifull, keep on writing. I felt your emotions.


    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      tlsledge

      thanks for the generous words I am glad you enjoyed it.


  • Marshall013004
    November 28, 2007

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    love the background!!! it sets your sonnet off for me as the reader. this is a beautiful write though. i wish you the best of luck in the contest !!!!

    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      Marshall0113004

      thanks so much for your wonderful words. I am glad it touched you. I made this background for this piece specal. Glad you enjoye dit as well.

  • michaeline
    November 28, 2007

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    Good luck on the contest.This form of rhyming sounds really hard when you break it all down.You made it flow efforlessly all the way through.Great job.My response is that alot of heart and soul went into this.your love shined through and you did a great job,Glad I got the chance to read it.Keep up the great work.

    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      michaeline

      Thanks my friend for your wonderful words. I enjoyed writing this piece very much. It was quite different than I usually write. Thanks for reading. I had some great inspiration for this piece.


  • ZachP silver member
    November 28, 2007

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    A wonderful sonnet with a lovely background
    Very nicely scribed, a wonderful gift for Amera.

    I wish you all the best,
    Zach.

    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      Rosewood Angel

      Thanks for your generous words my friend and glad you enjoyed it. And thanks again for your tip on the background.


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    What a wonderfully worded sonnet, lovely flow and great rhythm and rhyme in these lines. Thought the presentation was well done too.

    • freespirit51
      November 28, 2007
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      grannyeri

      thanks for your terrific comment. I am glad you enjoyed it. It was a new direction for me as you know. I made the background just for tis piece so I am glad you enjoyed that as well.


  • Ithica silver member
    November 27, 2007

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    Filled with such tenderness this is a beautiful sonnet! I really enjoyed everything about this piece. Your hard work shows in abundance! Best of luck in the contest!

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      Ithica

      Thanks for the kind words my friend. I am so glad you introduced me to the sonnet form. it fits well with many emotions I think. I shall continue to endevor to improve my sonnets.


  • Artistic-Soul
    November 27, 2007

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    very well presented im not one for erotic poetry and this came off very well with a class that seperates it from the common filth of the world

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      artistic-soul

      Thanks for your wonderful words. I hope this did not come off as erotic my friend. I wrote words of love not sex. My inspiration has brought words and emotions long buried and I am proud to be his Hemeoone.

  • piccola silver member
    November 27, 2007

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    sonnets are so beautiful and you did a really great job. I appreciate anyone who can master this form; as for me I cannot as of yet, but I do try every once in awhile. Great presentation too.

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      a-bear

      Thanks for your wonderful words. My Hetane is a great inspiration and his mingled with mine have made a beautiful poem of love. Glad you liked the background I made just for this piece.


  • Moodayo-Okohke silver member
    November 27, 2007

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    Silken words flow from your pen and opens the heart of mortal man...Kisses sweet and fingers touch, passion moves this love so much...Your Hetane smiles with pride for his Hemeoone

    ~BLACK CROW~

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      MY HETANE

      Thanks for your gentle words. I see you have added to words of your heart to this piece as well. I am glad you enjoyed our poem. Without your inspiration, I would not have the words.


  • warrior-eagle
    November 27, 2007

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    Great work.
    you are an amazing writer.
    you did awesome.
    i liked this very much.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • My Solitude
    November 27, 2007

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    Simply Stunning

    I saw this on the featured poems list and couldn't help myself from reading it. To begin with, the title is totally captivating. n just as i could assumed, the poem is much about the feelings of deep love and emotions that run behind the pasions described. But i could never have imagined how beautifully u'd bring each emotions alive with your magnificently crafted sentences. Well done poet... may U continue to love with all its glory


    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      Warrior-Eagle

      Thanks my friend. I am glad you enjoyed this latest piece. I really enjoyed writing it as well.

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      my solitude

      Thanks for giving my poem a read. I am glad the title caught your eye. I always try to make them catchy. This is one of my ADULT poem I have every written. I am so glad it came out so well. It is all about what is behind the passion and not the act of passion.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    A good write. Heartfelt. Good rhyme and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely depth of feeling. Thanks for sharing.


    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      ShellyA

      Thanks for your wonderful words of praise. glad you enjoyed it.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 27, 2007

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    O'MY...such beautiful words of love and passion you have penned...Words of love shared among friends...Tenderness to softly help the souls to mend...sigh... Winner for sure

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      Tender wolf

      Thanks my sweet sister. I know you are aware of how hard these words used to be for me. It is nice to let my words be light again. So glad it touched your tender heart.


  • ronnica
    November 27, 2007
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    It is a beautiful love sonnett and I love
    your backdrop.

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      ronnica

      Thanks for your kind comment. So glad it touched you. Glad you enjoy my background that I created just for this poem.


  • Rita Krocha
    November 27, 2007

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    Ah! This is beautiful!
    So full of passion and engrossing~
    Every line so nicely done. Amera must have loved it!
    Oh who wouldn't~ It's a masterpiece!

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      Spring Dale

      Thanks so much for your kind words. I owe much of this poem to my inspiration My Hetane. Without him my words not have been written.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    so smartly and so beautifully written

    the love and passion of your words really flowed out..
    touched us so lovely! Lucky woman you are!!
    Just beautiful as if a song!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen thankyou for writing and allowing us to
    breathe in such a beautiful and lovely poem!

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      ears2hearyou

      Thanks for your kind words. My inspiration truely is just that. He brings out the words lost to me for so long.


  • arafura gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    Hetane...

    Your feelings and passion for your Hetane are obvious in this very well written work! You have spoken the words of love in a loud clear voice... Good luck in the contest!

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      arafura

      Thanks my friend, these were some words we spoke to each other. Truely there is no passion between us. We are but truely good friends, but he does speak words that inspire these writes. My first Adult write.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    WOW!!!

    This is an absolutely magical and powerful piece of art!!! I always have a difficult time writing to such structured form, and I really admire this quality in poets such as yourself!!! This is a beautiful and inspiring masterpiece!!! Thank you for sharing your talent with all of us, and best of luck to you in this contest!!! Your sonnet, "Behind the Passion" is a winner!!! Peace, Cyn

    • freespirit51
      November 27, 2007
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      Rose of Ireland

      Thanks Rose for your beautiful comment. This is a first for me. I never really wrote such explicit words of passion and desire befoe. My inspiration is to get all the credit, without whom this would never have been written.

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