Her pillow waits
as she wanders;
clouds caressing her face
finding a smile faded,
her dreams lost
within flowing tresses
where his fingertips once ran.
Windswept, she watches
the sea fall away in ripples
like memories, shattered
by one reckless moment.
As a wilted bouquet dries
and crumbles in her hand,
she tries to salvage
petals to press
and what is left of her heart.
♥
Author notes
Option 2.
image E.
Amaranth by
Liliana Sanches
You wanted sad, Sis, so this is for you...
love ya always ♥
A contest entry
- Another Sad Contest!!! {{Picture & Song Quote Inspired}} by PerfectImperfection.
685 points, ended December 12, 2007, 34 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beutiful
what a great poet you are.
Congrats on the trophy.
Well deserved -
This is so graceful and serene. Thank you for sharing this fine work of art.
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Congrats on the gold, for this worthy piece.
The images were so very sad with .. a beauty.
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Good
Good imagery and write. Sad when she says "the sea fall away in ripples
like memories, shattered
by one reckless moment.
As a wilted bouquet dries
and crumbles in her hand," very emotional
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I thought i commented on this piece but did not, it is truly brilliant. I see the host too like it. Great great job, you have a great one. By the way, your thoughts and the lines chosen highlight your talent. keep up the most stellar job.
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This piece did what I requested...it made me cry. Such a very beautiful sadness you have penned within these lines my dear. So much can be felt; such an agonizing loss, unsure of how to pick up the pieces - or if there is anything more than ashes to salvage. I loved this. Thank you!
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So poignant and sad, sweetie This one just reaches out and touches the heart
Wonderfully, yet sadly written, sweetie
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"As a wilted bouquet dries
and crumbles in her hand,
she tries to salvage
petals to press
and what is left of her heart."...
Sad
..but a very beautiful poem..good luck in the contest!
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Beautifully sad piece Lynda
The imagery is wonderful and bittersweet. These lines in particular stand out head & shoulders above the rest:
"As a wilted bouquet dries
and crumbles in her hand,
she tries to salvage
petals to press
and what is left of her heart."
I think this piece will do very well in this contest Hun...
Nicely done, and best of luck to you!
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Brilliant, the outflow of such utter emotional destitution is so powerful in this piece, it grabs the heartstrings so the reader effectively shares the pain. well done and best wishes.
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