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Perfect

It always seemed, since
The first day I met you,
That what we have was
Always so perfect.

Our love was a
Fantasy to me.
And your kisses
Were something else.

It was just
So perfect.

But you started to change,
And you really hurt me.
I used to cry everyday
Because you really
Made me feel like I was
Nothing.

You made me feel I was
Away from perfect.

And now every time we kiss,
It tastes bitter.
Poisoned because our
Love is just a fairytale,
Materialized out of lies.

A perfected disaster
To tear us apart.

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OPTION 4. "love always hurts eventually"

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  • Re-invention silver member
    June 18, 2008
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    really good hun.. nicely done!


  • Passionate Phoenix
    March 13, 2008

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    this is really good from someone so young. This is a write that to me cries out and tells me straight away that this is first love. sweet and innocent, but often falls in a sad and tragic way (probably due to inexperience, I know mine was!! lol
    This was a very sweet write which hits the nail on the head - all first love seems perfect. Romantically innocent.

    I liked this piece, well done and thanks for entering xxx


  • Beauty Of Silence
    March 7, 2008

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    Wow, finally a poem inspired by one of my favourite songs! The ittle is catchy, and your poem just stood out! it was very simple, your words were so siple, but your emotions were real pure and that made this poem somehow stad out!

    I could feel the pain in your words! So true... and your last stanza was simple amazing! the stanza before that was my favourite!

    Thanks for this awesome entry! best wishes!

    Much love always,
    Ranji


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 27, 2007

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    The last stanza here is amazing, for me it just stood out the most. A pain nicely defined, by imperfection. Thank you for your entry!