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Winter smiled that season.

Missing image

Winter smiled

that season of laughter

and avalanche'd love

as we pelted snowballs

rolled as one

in the crunching snow.

 

 

As we lay before the hearth

Naked on a bear rug

where passion glowed

brighter than the fire.

 

 

Wafts of parafin

from the Tilly lamp

mingled and lingered

high into the rafters

in a cloud of smoke...

 

 

But we glowed rosy,

felt cosy and the only

interruption was the

logs on the fire collapsing

to settle in a fine ash.

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  • Freswinn
    October 15, 2008

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    Some great imagery, my friend. Simple and elegant, to the point; no further explanation needed.

    *interruption (two r's)
    *collapsing, not clapsing


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    January 23, 2008

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    That is definitely an image of love...

    I adore the warmth radiating throughout the piece, with the fire and cozy and glow... great images.
    Thank you for entering this well written piece.
    I think "cosy" should be spelled "cozy"

  • ansari2005
    November 27, 2007

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    It's a potrait of immortal love. This is her credit how beautifully sketched it.I think every human is lokking for the situation to come in his/her life


  • Kiddy
    November 27, 2007

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    The winter and the love scene are beautifully portrayed here. Very well written. Very gentle tone and language. Thanks for sharing.
    Lols
    -Kiddy


  • sarahbethb17
    November 27, 2007

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    Wow. I try to leave constructive criticism on poems i read but I don't think there's anything at all I would change! I enjoyed following this couple through fun experiences to love and have felt so many of these things myself. What a wonderful piece, thank you for sharing it with us!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    Absolutely beautiful!!!

    I love the gently emerging picture of the unique closeness of these two people in love, comfortable with one another in descriptive words which for me, is so difficult to portray. Only your muse can do this, Lady Poetess!!! Wishing you all the best in this contest!!!

  • michaeline
    November 26, 2007

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    This is very descriptive and invites you well into your mind and into what you were thinking.You made us think of all the great things of winter.Great job and good luck on the contest.Made me want to snuggle up to a cozy fire with my man and hide under the cover with him for days!


  • januaryrain gold member
    November 26, 2007
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    I loved it

    what a beautiful picture you paint of a season of love, sigh


  • Cannonsfire
    November 26, 2007

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    Sigh..see there are some good things about dull grey and snowing Love, C

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