The sky opens, colors fall, keys are grazed, a song begins
one sounds, another, more follow
they are soft, wavering, random
hints of pastels lightly caress the flesh
sending small pulses of fervor through the crowd
a fleeting sensation, the notes tingle
Author notes
It's not finished yet, but a work in progress. I don't know if the flow is right and the punctuation, it's a bit different then what I normally write. So I could use any help and helpful criticism. I've taken anothre recent look back over it and it seems like i have too much punctuation.
A contest entry
- I have flu by Entwining Beauty.
380 points, ended November 28, 2007, 9 entries
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wow this is beautiful
thank you for entering into my contest 
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