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Why Must We Part?

As the clocks strikes ten
this is the moment
my heartache

starts again.

 

The telephone rings
and you walk out
leaving me longing
my mind no longer full of doubt.

 

I don't want to lose you

but there's nothing

that I can do

oh, how you make me blue.

 

In search of the answers

to all these questions

my heart always asks

it's impossible to do these impossible tasks.

 

I don't want you to hurt

or flee from my arms

just give in

and fall for my charms.

 

I don't want to lose you

I've given you the best

each night you lay down

           to rest.

I've been hurt before

I need someone to hold

and bring me out

of the cold.

 

You always leave

when I ask you not to

what can I do

I can't help but wear my heart on my sleave.

 

Every time I hold her

it's your arms that I feel

and when we kiss

it's you that I miss.

You can't lie to me anymore

just what am I fighting for

am I not the one for you

why can't you just be true.

 

I know in my heart

that I love you

why can't you see

why must you always part?

 

Author notes

I don't know what to call this, but this is supposed to be two people conversing and I got my inspiration from the song by Sugarland called "Stay" please be kind with your comments.

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  • Sweetangelgrace
    December 4, 2007

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    A heart wrenching piece my dear!

    I don't know you but when I am reading your piece, I feel some sadness and my heart is aching...
    Being lonely and hurting sucks but being with someone for all the wrong reasons is worst. You need someone to treat you how you would treat them.

    GRACE

  • midnightblue1272
    November 27, 2007
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    Interesting

    This is one interesting piece. The song was a good inspiration for you. Fine work.


  • z etoile
    November 27, 2007
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    How about "Secrets of the heart"?


  • moonbumps silver member
    November 27, 2007
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    Clever configuration here...neat write.x


  • Momentai
    November 27, 2007
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    neat format, left and righ


  • bananasfoster42
    November 26, 2007

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    i like it! my first impression was that it was one person, like two conflicting sides fighting against eachother. nice work!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 26, 2007

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    This is pretty cool! I love the whole concept
    of this piece. Very interesting work here.
    Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep it up!




    Jeremy0826


  • Angel Wings1960
    November 26, 2007

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    "Why Must We Part?" is a good title, that is just my suggestion you are the author.


    This is a good way of showing two people who are at struggles with their relationship.


  • bones7
    November 26, 2007
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    it is good.
    i suggest"Why"
    for the tittle.
    but its your choice bro.

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