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ImDamnSure

Long nights spent with the thought of holding me so close

with your most obvious weakness

 …your feelings…

wore on your sleeves so that everyone can see.

and if I don’t feel the same?
you start shaking at the thought
How can you describe to anyone else how you feel?

What will they say?

I’m just a friend.

At least that’s what they think… 

You are everything I want

 You tell me and I laugh

Cause you are everything I’m not
So are we too different?

and would this ever work?

we lay thinking of what could be…

Not thinking of what is… 

we lay together

This is what I want?

I wanted to be close.

just not too close

Its too close
 

how close is close enough ?

 

Author notes

Taking Back sunday
MakeDamnSure


I don't know if this is want you wanted.... but I sure had fun with it lol

lol... sorry about the pun in the title....

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  • x dont.cry.out x
    December 7, 2007
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    your goooood.


  • Xombii
    December 2, 2007

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    OOooOOo

    I look the way you used the lyrics.
    It didn't sound choppy or forced at all,
    which is really hard to do with this type of writing.
    I love it!


    “You are everything I want”

    You tell me and I laugh

    Cause you are everything I’m not
    So are we too different?

    and would this ever work?

    I have felt this way before.
    Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.
    Love this write.


  • PastelMoons gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    I love this!!!
    so many emotions
    so much turmoil
    and excitment
    ah the thrills and throes
    of passion!!
    Great write hun!!!
    ~Pastel