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i.
freedom disabled
life tangled
in the dark
for a period
longer than
silence's journey
ii.
bodies fall
like dried leaves
and tears
frost bitten.
iii.
empty and cold
is their shelter
day and night
and the space
in between
iv.
hope is
of no definition
removed
from vocabulary
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Author notes
Written November 26, 2007
Prompt: 'Holocaust'
A contest entry
- Quest For The Best - Rounds Contest - Free Verse Only by Cupcrazy.
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Comments
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The imagery of this poem is truly amazing again!
Definately a wonderful poem you have written here!
thanks for this entry as well!
Leander -
Curdling effects from the prompt. Very effective and strong. You penned with power and heart strings within this piece.
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bravo, kabayan! this is such a wonderful poem...conciseness at its finest display yet the emotion you wanted to convey is also fully presented...isa ka talagang magaling na manunulat!
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Oh man, pen friend..with few precisely chosen words you punctuate my air with what leads to a heart-punding close... totally an awesome writing.
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Beautifully written, stark and truthful. The emotion drifts softly from each line like a whisper until it becomes a scream. Excellent piece, loved it
Hugs, Bunny
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I really liked the second part. It's incredibly simple, as if said with a soft voice, but it strikes such a powerful chord with its image...
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the last vignette is such a deep sigh - I would imagine it would have been so hard to remain hopeful..sad
well written
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