Only after my heart has
Breathed one too many times of its own hateful perfume...
Not until then will I understand love.
Only after I've witnessed
The damage I have created from witless lies,
That's when I'm counted among the blessed.
I fall too many times,
And never seem to look back;
Only encouraging the same mistake again...
One, two, three times over.
I won't be good, no matter how hard I try;
But once I've given up, it becomes easy to live.
And maybe I'll make my mark...
But only after.
Please tell me what you think
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Great poem! I read it 4 times trying to figure out which line was my favorite. I can't pick! I love the whole thing!!! Wonderful job! Hope you post another soon!
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whoa! what a write!
'Only after my heart has
Breathed one too many times of its own hateful perfume...
Not until then will I understand love.'
can love ever be understood??? other than God's love that still can't be understood, but at least it isn't filled with deception and uncaring lies... which really isn't love anyway...
my mom told me once that being good isn't about trying, it's something inside... but needs nourished with kindness and truth... once we let other things in to fester, well... as you say, once you give up, it SEEMS easier to live, but it is more like a slow death... well, i can't really explain it... all i know is that once that happens, it can stagnate you and eventually make it all that much harder...
trying to be perfect (or the appearance of it) should be given up on, but giving up on goodness... don't do it, it's worth the battle.
goodness is true, perfection is a lie.
with that said... as much as it may not make any sense... this poem really got me thinking and i like to do that once in a while.
your darker side writes out into a great poem.
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hmmm, a very interesting poem. i like it alot, and i'm glad to see a poem from you! great job! =)
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only after I read it again...
I still won't want to stop reading it again...this was so ambiguous, that I kept reading it and reading it trying to figure it out...I liked the line about giving up, and life becoming easier thereafter...it was an entirely melancholy line, but I think I could have expected a melancholy poem from you its your talent...that line carries alot of truth to it too though...awesome write, welcome back to la la land...
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Great write, kristin.
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wow!! YOu actually wrote a poem!!! lol, it was absolutely amazing!!!! It was dark,powerful, and awsome! I had to read it a few times to get it though.... but hey that's me
loved it! I hope you'll write another soon! I'll be watching ! Awsome write!
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yay!!! kristin's back, and her poetry's better than ever!!! this was awesome. it was so deep, and so powerful. it was dark, but hopeful, yet it sounded hollow. how a poem can sound deep and hollow at the same time, is something only you can truely manage. this was beautiful. i like the second line, it had a certain something to it that made it seem to pop out. please keep writing!!! we miss you on here!!!
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