Bare feet press against brown dirt,
Careful to avoid the fragrant blooms
That is the sensuality of woman.
Author notes
I don't enter many contests, but this was such a picture! I will probably loose - but interesting contest!
A contest entry
- The Girl in Lavender (topless Picture) by amaranthine lover.
363 points, ended December 10, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think about the title??? It's up for grabs....
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MY FAVORITE OF THEM ALL! Simplicity really does hold supreme. Men once crazy at womens ankles! Ha ! Wonderful!
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I think this is a very strong piece, I like how you worded everything in it, don't lose faith in yourself. please keep writing
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wow
I don't need the picture its amazing alone. I do hope you win though -
wow
I don't need the picture its amazing alone. I do hope you win though
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Ooh, I like that - 'press'. One I hadn't thought of.
Interesting how you found the woman in the picture 'careful'...
Good luck in the contest
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wonderful
what a delightful poem! it brings a fragrance to the reader's imagination. you could turn this into a really nice haiku with little effort.
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i didn't need a picture to see your true portrayal of the gentleness of woman, even in the nature of things she takes care to preserve and protect, and cherish. lovely write....Melissa.
~~~~~~~~~~~Artis
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I like the title. I loved the last line, it's like BAM, this is not only the lastline but the title, BAM! In yo face1 I love!
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I like the title, it definately fits the picture--which is wonderful by itself, but your poem makes it better...well done!!
Wyatt xxx
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Exquisite
It's very rarely that I ever read a poem that really strikes me within to the point that I have no commentary for it. This is one of them. I would only be re-expressing what you have written -- a beautiful truth at that. You capture a candid essence of the picture in those three, short, wonderful lines.
I wish you mountains of luck in the contest!
S.
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