Sticks and stone break my bones,
tis words that broke my heart.
Fissures form with emptiness,
whenever love departs.
Words said, can we just be friends,
rips your insides apart.
After giving me love so wonderful,
you took back your heart.
Now all thoughts reeks of sorrow,
so hard to comphrehend.
The surface pain we bury deep,
when love comes to an end.
There it stays constant reminder,
settles in makes us numb.
To never play the fool again,
no more to love succumb.
Yes sticks and stone cause me pain,
but words cut like a knife,
Words pierce my soul, mind and heart,
forever changed my life.
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- Options: Emotions by Veeolin.
525 points, ended June 25, 2008, 41 entries
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Why was it written that" a tongue is like a fire" Or the older generation said "Watch your tongue".You know the pain,kind heart you have,and they that have kind hearts hurt all the more,so may I give you comfort sis,from a broken heart too, and any I may have broken thoughtlessly and say will you forgive me too? Such a beautiful write...and we know healing takes time...Hugs to you from me...
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I know exactly how this feels. Even though Louis and I broke up 2 months ago, it all still hurts just as bad. Words do hurt more than stones. WOnderful write. keep up the good work.
love always and forever, Marissa Rae
~*~theXmadXhatter~*~
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G'Day Beautiful
♥
I feel like a weird person because I have never had to endure that feeling or those words 'Can we just be friends' ... unless I count the beginning of David and my relationship where he was determinated to push me away and just be friends (That didn't work out for him did it ?
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Other than that I have never had to go through that because I have only let my heart open to David and I was blessed he held it in his and began to beat the same rhythm.
Reading this though ... I felt it strongly from your words and it hurt
I feel for anyone who has to go through that pain now.
Powerfully penned hun
Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
Love to you
~Manda
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The empty feeling
Oh I have known that. The empty feeling you get in your stomach when love is gone. But you have the words
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You my dear will have to learn how to build a walk.
So you cantake those sticks and stones and fuild a path with a gate. The you can walk all over the and lean upon the gate. You see with this all done, saying you are not welcone to come in.
Go and try and find yourself a friend. This is the end of me and you.
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Deeply personal and touching this is, Sandy
Words can cut like a knife or words can heal and refresh an ailing spirit; may you find the words to refresh and to renew your spirits...always -
a powerful write which holds so much within these words. it holds deep emotions. well done and best of luck
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