I've had visions of wonderful purity
ones of love,
of passion,
of joy
reaching endlessly towards a future
unknown; unseen,
by the naked eye
Dreams of perpetual fulfillment
ones past physical limitations,
beyond all boundaries,
transient in it’s powerful essence,
permeating the woven fabric that is
the tapestry of our lives
Voices raised in perfect harmony,
heartstrings oscillate into
chords of pure beauty
Priceless gifts of deep-felt emotion,
kissed by grace
and by endless devotion
Enfolded in embraces of warmth-filled sighs
a single heartbeat
shared,
through lovers’ eyes
Author notes
Inspiration:
"I sit here and wonder if you'll ever understand just how much of me belongs to you." -unknown
In a list
A contest entry
- FALLING IN LOVE by Liquid memories.
525 points, ended December 19, 2007, 28 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOVE IN A HURRY by Hectic Michelle.
450 points, ended January 6, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - rockerchkpoet's DFI Rounds Contest ~~~ Round 1 - Dress to Impress by And Hyetal.
600 points, ended January 17, 2008, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hope For Tomorrow by CherryOnTop.
2200 points, ended January 6, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRE-WRITES GALLORE ~!~!~! by Naridill.
800 points, ended January 31, 2008, 138 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Very Easy !!! by Loveandblessings2u.
1000 points, ended April 28, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romancing The Muse by 2lullabyhaven.
520 points, ended May 10, 2008, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me Feel something Real by BearWoman.
1050 points, ended April 11, 36 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love, does it really exist? by geckogirl.
850 points, ended May 12, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a stunning piece of literature - a credit to your poetic skills. inspiring on both an emotional and artistic level. excellent.
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Wow your words are so pure and lovely they flow like a very beautiful fountain!! This is truly remarkable and lovely!! I love it!!!
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Wow I see your awards congratulation on those. I really enjoy reading this. It made my heart beat like crazy! I hope you do wonderful in my contest and thanks for your entrie.
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beautiful
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aww! i loved this! it was so sweet!
your take on the prompt was amazing! congrats on the trophies; they were rightfully deserved. this was just beautiful! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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wow... this is turely deserving of all your trophies... thank you so much for entering my contest... goos luck....
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Lovely and uplifting
"Voices raised in perfect harmony, / heartstrings oscillate into / chords of pure beauty"
*sigh* A truly wonderful poem! An excellently penned example of the potential to which free verse an reach. One understands why so many trophies were garnered for this work. Thank you for sharing it with me.
"transient in it’s powerful essence," -> its
"unknown; unseen," perhaps remove the comma? (I don't think it's needed, due to the line break)
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Wow. amazing. This was beautiful
in ever which way even if you
turned it upside down and
inside out this was just breath-taking
and so passionate.
Loved this
Thanks for entering & best of luck -
Oh so wonderfully penned. This has a wonderful depth and it is rich with emotion.
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That was a wonderful you've written... I love it...
It was beautifully heartwarming... I truly enjoyed reading it...
(Most especially this part).. :-)
"Enfolded in embraces of warmth-filled sighs
a single heartbeat
shared,
through lovers’ eyes"
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wow!
This is such an awesome poem in its essense and the truth it portrays. The prompt was beautiful and the poem made it even more so.
"Enfolded in embraces of warmth-filled sighs
a single heartbeat
shared,
through lovers’ eyes"
such amazing line. the rhyme was good too and the style, so different and wonderful to read. congrats on the lovely trophies and good luck in this contest!
transit~
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such a sweet piece. I love every emotion within every line, and the beautiful imagery you painted iwth your words. this is simply amazing
congrats on all the trophies && best of lucks.
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Well, a truly heart-felt poem seething with beautiful words and a few hints at beauteous imagery. Good luck in the contest and thanks for taking the time to enter.
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wow - so have you built a trophy case for this poem yet?!?! Good concept, thanks for entering this into my contest
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this is a beautiful poem
so very well written in smooth beautiful words that flow in the harmony of love, excellent write
Thank you for this entry and good luck in the contest
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Lovely Words!!!
You have penned such a beautiful poem. The words are so soft and hearfelt. It so deserves all those trophys. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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priceless piece and thank you for entering
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Congrats on all of your trophies, this is a most lovely poeme...thanks for enteringlol
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" Voices raised in perfect harmony,
heartstrings oscillate into
chords of pure beauty
".
OMG ~~~ I really can't explain how much
I love that part.
Your ending made my heart melt,
this is truly very beautiful.
magnificent piece of poetry.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
good luck in my contest.
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Beautiful. Thank you for sharing your favorite with me, best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Beautiful and so fluent emotions, you have crafted this piece well with awesome phrasing and grasping imagery.
Thanks for entering,
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Very beautiful and I love the background
that you chose for this. Great form and
very meaningful write. Thanks so much
for entering my contest! I appreciate it
and wish you the best of luck with it here!
Keep up the wonderful work!
Jeremy0826 -
Loved the verbiage in this and the exquisitely woven expressions.Very well written!Wht I didn't appreciate was seeing it in so many contests, which makes u conclude that u hv only 1 write which is worth entering in contests??Anyways, Thanks for entering
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Wow lot of contests...a great piece, congrats on the trophy's and good luck in this contest
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Excellent
Very well done. Congratulations on your trophies.
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A lovely piece of thought conveyed within these lines. Very well written sentiments, with some great imagery woven within. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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congrats on all the trophies! well deserved! i felt the flow was good and you have some descriptive imagery...thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
~NineTailedFox -
WOW
so much i have missed and yet a muse you have found. Absolutely beautiful sweetie thanks for such an amazing read.
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stunning!!!
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amazin thanx
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sweet
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Already commented below but once again this piece is remarkable. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Good luck and thank you for entering my contest.
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nice job. keep up the good work.
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Nothing is sweeter than when two become one even in ink. The two of you flow like the scent that rises from the garden in spring, bursting with the delicate aroma of love. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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reaching endlessly towards a future
unknown; unseen,
by the naked eye
kissed by grace
and by endless devotion
Where do you get all these good lines? Do you have a master poet walking around your house saying things all the time! D< -tries to steals talent-
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A Wonderful Collaboration
A True Work of Art!
Thank you for sharing, I thoroughly enjoyed it!
PureCountry
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well, A lot of colorful wording... and I guess you like this one a lot to enter it in so many contests - well, good luck with it - hopefully you do well. Thanks!
Koko -
content 7.1
vocabulary 10.2
accuracy 7.65
creativity 7.4
theme 7.2
originality 7.2
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I fell in love with this poem while reading it. I can tell you're an amazing poet just by reading this, and you're sure to do well in these rounds...
All of the love imagery was absolutely wonderful, and the whole poem flowed perfectly.
You'll be sure to find yourself on the list for round #2.
Thank you so much for entering.
Always,
Cassie
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It's truly beautifully said~ I actually seen a few poets on the A.P. write using that format for freewrites. I generally tend to enjoy it cause of the movement and the sound of the piece.
Nice job ~ Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ pleasure having you ~ good luck to you~
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Very elegant... that's the only word that comes to mind. Well, beautiful does too... but elegant represents it better I think. Well, done. As far as grammatical or spelling errors... none that I could find.
~*DJ*~
P.S. Thanks for following the rules and good luck in my contest. Also, have a very safe and Happy Holiday season and please be patient as I'm wanting a lot of entries and will continue extending the deadline until then...
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Untouchable...
These words echo a soft whisper cross the seas, from within two hearts that sing to one tune. I can appreciate every word of this one, and on reading again, would gladly embrace all warmth-filled sigh.
Absolutely perfect in stirring the emotions.
Thank you
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very pretty.
Thanks for the entry!
WWW* -
This is good. I like it. Keep up your good work! best of luck in my contest and the other open ones.
Crimson -
I quite like the structure, creative big words that fit perfectly with the theme
Love does indeed to me surpass all physical boundaries
Very well done
Thank you and Good Luck
Cindy
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very beautiful thks for entering
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Sighs, you write such wonderful poetry. I think you did a wonderful job, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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Full of cliche's and a grammatical error on the possessive pronoun but otherwise it's stellar
This sounds so very good that I think it should be sent to Hallmark after it is revised and edited.
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This is a great piece of writing, such beautiful imagery Well done and thank you for entering x
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Great write, it makes me think of my ex, and giving all another chance... =)
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I love this poem, the presentation is very nice, and the word choice is fantastic. It is a very classy piece, sophisticated. I did not read the contests its in but im assuming it was a picture prompt and i believe you fullfilled the image of the picture very well.
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WOW! That was absolutely beautiful!!! Great imagery and metaphore in this piece. I loved it! Good luck in my contest!
♥Summer Moonstone♥
PS. I cannot judge this piece fairly untill all other contests it is in are over and judged. -
thank you, for such is real love that exists and fills the heart of each one. success in this contest.
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one of your best writes! Beautiful words. Good luck in contest, I'm sure this is a winner.
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Just beautiful.
What a wonderful ideal you have woven into these words. If it is obtained the two people you speak of have the most blissfull relationship of all time. It is an ideal to strive for. Many would be thankful for a relationship with this kind of devotion shared by both parteners. All your words are absolutely beautiful in this and I feel that they are meant from your heart. Your title and the poem are just right for each other and your poem is true to the propmt. I wish you well in the contest.
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I love this poem. This is what love is all about. We must have the vision and the will to discover it and get perptual fulfillment.
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*claps* Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I really love this. This is an amazing poem. It has excellant flow and is beautifully written. Love is an amazing feeling. Physical things in a relationship ahould NOT be put first. That isn't what love is about. I DO believe though that only two people that truly love eachother should have any kind of physical relationship. But it's not everything. Again I'll say it, beautiful. On a scale of one to ten I'm giving this a 10. Hands down. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Megan -
I really like this. Your word choice is wonderful!
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I love this piece! It's so spiritual and full of love - exactly the kind of mix that I love. The imagery is amazing, and I just really wanted to be one of the two. Good job!
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thanks for your entry.
Lea -
heartfelt
beautiful write on love . . like your descriptions . . very nice picture as well . . also like "reaching endlessly towards a future" and "Enfolded in embraces of warmth-filled sighs" . . very nice ending . . good luck in the contests!
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This was touching. I thought this was well put:
'permeating the woven fabric that is the tapestry of our lives'
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yeah i've had dreams like that myself! lol some dreams just seem too perfect 4 reality though
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This is so sweet and what most of us would love to know of at least once in our lives.
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Beautiful poem, really stunning write. The rythm of the words draws you in and holds your attention all the way through. If it was my contest, no contest. Gold.
Good luck and thank you for sharing.
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This is so beautiful.So heartfelt and true to life.You got out what you felt and it was easy for the reader to understand and relate times in their own past to it.You are Bessed with the ability of great writing.The title that you picked was perfect.I think the effect of the first and last lines really had an impact on the reader.
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Wow this is truly beautiful, like you have a secret heart to share! Or maybe something deeper...and then I see a collaborative effort. Well done for in your words, it is not obvious from what is written and works well indeed. What a beautiful picture to boot!
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Excellent!
Wonderfully inscribed you two,
thanks for sharing, and all the best in the contest!
Peace, Bro Timothy << Flower for sissy.. LOL..
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OMG>..I am such a duhhhhhhhhh~~
Love this collaboration for I just realized it was..
(gently smacks head)
You both did a Magnificent job!!
Wooooooooooooooo Hoooooooooooooo
now I can go find the other part of my noggin
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Beautiful!!
Love the images You have brought forth with emotions from the Heart
Wonderful weaving of words
Thank You for sharing Your Talent Beautiful!
Love this!!
Many blessings to You in the contest
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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A beautiful piece of love and tenderness. Well done to you both. Love, C
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awwwwwwwwwwww a delightful love write. success in the contest. loved the flow of this and the feelings you gave to me. thank you for sharing this.
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This is just beautiful. A wonderful work of love's art from both your pens. Just simply breath-taking.
Good luck in the contest.
Storm -
my dear Sister your words illuminate the love that is exuding from your heart with pure love and passion. many blessings always xxx
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i love the flow of this, the way you have written the lines out.
the last seven lines are especially beautiful.
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Beautiful poem. You know a poem is a strong one, when you have to really think about it after reading; Very good write.
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Beautiful write. Powerful emotion. I liked the third stanza the best. It seemed to describe the feeling of happiness and describing how people can make others feel in the heart well. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a very beautiful poem. I absolutely loved it. You did a marvelous job with writing this and this is worthy of me adding to one of my favs. Good luck to you in the contest I hope you win.
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a poetic masetrpieice, lovely work, thanks for entering and good luc
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Girlfriend, this is just so beautiful! You always capture a multitude of emotions with your poetry....best of luck to ya...smiles, Terry
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I can not even explain how beautiful I found this lovely piece to be.
This becomes my favorite by you.
Not that you'll need it, but the best of luck in the contest.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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I am still such an old romantic at heart and love the tenderness of your poems of love. The picture enhances your write but your words outclass the picture for me.
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THIS IS THE DEEPEST KIND OF LOVE
This is the kind of love ones needs to keep close and cherish forever.
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