I have not traveled far
Nor read every single book
But my knowledge it is great
It is
For I have heard the sea.
I heard it in a sea shell
A rushing wooshing whoop
From somewhere deep inside
The earth
Or maybe deep in me.
I do not know and cannot tell
For though I've heard the sea
It could be my imagination
Is just
Tricking me.
I do not understand myself
This is my greatest flaw
For though I've seen beyond myself
My insides
Are like a wobbily see-saw.
For I have never looked inside
And seen so very deeply
Because I think I must see
More than
I see naturally.
Now I know but its too late
That I should have been glad
To see inside only
Myself for
Looking too far is bad.
A contest entry
- Your Very Best by Lj-.
300 points, ended November 29, 2007, 37 entries
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Do you think this poem has good imagery? Is it good free verse?
Comments
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Yes to both those questions! I really like this! I am going to add it to the finalists... THere! Great job!
Viv
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"...insides is..." would be better stated as "...insides are..."
Nice structure to this piece.
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Nice
I really like the flow. I will be back to reread. Good luck in the contest.
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