Lightening falls unto the Earth
striking fear in the hearts of men,
who, frightened, fall,
then strike the men
who make them fall
and fall again.
The cycle turns, and turns too well,
as just the young can lead from hell,
the tortured souls of foolish men,
who finish war to start again.
None seem to know, to realize,
that the best of flames lie in fireflies
bringing wonder to the hearts and eyes
of children with no hate inside.
Perhaps if men embrace their girls,
and let them help to teach the world
with optimism, faith and love,
we may return like broken doves
to a place so kind that once was here,
we can, together, relinquish fear
and hold our children in gentle times,
and all of us chase fireflies.
ocerus
(God bless you, Tammy! It's been too long!) - oce
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Very well said with grace, dignity and intent. Very imaginative use of words and skillfully constructed. Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it is gently unfolded for the readers delight.
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Oh my goodness! This is an exceptional piece of work. It isn't just perfect in form and flow, but the depth of your words....touch my heart. It dances and swirls it's colors, till I am part of your masterpiece. I think this is the first thing I recall reading, but I will add you to my favorites now. It speaks to me of the cruelty and absurd hatreds that run our little planet, but your hope swells in the second stanza. It is so brightly lite with hope that it brings tears to my eyes for the fireflys, I too have chased "with no hate inside". The final stanza takes us home, literally to the place where "we may return like broken doves". I am just blown away by this poem and I at a loss for words and being a writer myself, that's saying something. I think we see the world as it is, but pray for the world as it should be. So that we may "hold our children in gentle times". My hat is off to you, poet! Blessings, Doris
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Excellent Message
This is a beautifully crafted excellent message.
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This was so beautiful! It was wonderfully written, and I like the idea and image of firelies in this used as a comparison to wonder, faith and love. Excellent descriptions, and excellent piece!
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Oce!!! HOW ARE YOU?
long time no see!! LOL
wow...what a lovely surprise to find you here...
thank you for this beautiful entry!
the entire last stanza is very touching...it makes me think of my Daddy and how he tried to raise me...
God Bless him! LOL
you know...this pic made me think of myself as a little girl and my Daddy calling me inside from chasing lightening bugs...
LOVE, LOVE, LOVE THIS:
bringing wonder to the hearts and eyes
of children with no hate inside.
great write dear one...
thank you for sharing your time and talent with me! I shall be by your shores to visit you very soon...
Blessings! Tammy
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