Luminous innocence
beams from the eyes of a child,
encircled by only love,
radiating joy and wonderment.
Tiny steps dance into reality,
slowly, stumbling,
ominous falls continue,
new emotions emerge.
THE LIGHT DIMS!!!
A contest entry
- Streetcorner by malmadre.
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Beautifully expressed
The innocence of our youth when no 'pretense' of all lifes negatives is even considered.What a wonderful world we would have if those "negatives" were never known!Yet we learn from our 'stumbling and falls'
growing stronger and hopefully wiser from each lesson learned.
Very well expressed.
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Excellent
Tiny steps dance into reality,
slowly, stumbling,
ominous falls continue,
new emotions emerge.
I have read several poems by you
All very good
Rick
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Good Prompt Take!
Well done dear! I was perplexed at the last line until I looked at the prompt. Yes, these words are fitting for the pix displayed & how many in the world view life. We can grow yet still remain childlike & not childish if we know our heavenly Father & then our light grows as we are filled with His Light!
for a fine write! 
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Life is more cruel as we experience it sometimes, the hope that shines in the eyes of the young with their dreams of bright futures does indeed dim with each disappointment. The remarkable thing is, that hope renews!
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It is sad when we see the innocene of a child become devoured by the social setting or influince of media fed percetions. We try to fit in and leave ourselves out. This is an emotional piece which conjures many differant scenarios in the mind's eye. Thank-you for sharing
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thank you again my friend for your time and your comment. God bless
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Luminous innocents -- innocence.
I like the imagery in this, but I'm not entirely sure what the significance of the last line (or why it's in all caps). If you seek to show the transience or plain loss of innocence after childhood, perhaps another stanza would be more effective.
Good poem, though. Keep writing!
hiraeth. -
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*what the significance of the last line IS. [nonexistent] god, i fail at typing today.
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Sad
Can't get my hear around it - it could include divers situations - either way, sadness is felt - keep on keeping on - BLESS GOD - Joe
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