This tiny buried hole
in my heart (or was it my soul?)
that, with your quick merciless fingers,
you stretched into
a gaping, aching chasm--
--sweet dusk summertime haze
that we pulled and stretched
into languid, lazy days
curves meet lips
and angles unsteady,
breasts against chest
soft whispers and we're ready,
tight, tangled embrace,
soft meeting hard,
my breath meeting your face,
you feel your name
hot on my lips
and your sweet salt sweat
feels my fingertips,
you show me what it means to need
and we create our own eclipse.
Author notes
Something to be proud of, no?
A contest entry
- Your Best Prewrite 2 by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended December 10, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Poems. by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Oh, the pain of getting what you've always wanted....
Comments
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A very pretty piece. Short but powerful in its simplicity. I could feel the.. erotic charge within the lines.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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i personally found this to be proud of. i just wonder why you wasn't awarded anything. heavenly angel and i have a bone to pick. i agree with ladyshiva, this is a very emotional piece and so...arousing in it's quiet simplicity.♥
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That was so wonderfuly done. I am still trying to recover from the emotion of this piece. Very intense and tastefuly done. Excellent work, Great Poet!
Lauren
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Oh wow!
How wonderfully and beautifully done this is!
Intensely written!
A fine sharing into this contest; I wish you all the very best! -
wow... that left me breathless... you always have such a beautiful flowing and effortless way of describing things... you always leave me in awe xxx
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wow...!
Very strong and honest my friend! There is a realness about this and the imagery is sharp and vivid. This has got to be one of your best works I think! Bravo!
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Thank you so much!!!
That comment made my whole morning.
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Beautiful. I loved it.
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It's something you're making me fancy.
I fancy it indeed.
XD
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that was suposed to be pounding heart not an emoticon. -
Yessssssss
Be very proud of
ounding heart: this is beautiful.
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