Night Falls
Bell tolls
Whispering softly
A Knife works
Blood bleeds
She cries
He lies.
Promises Fallen
Like a token,
Words unspoken
He hurts
I hurt
Feeling like desert.
Evil me
Devil he
So much used to
With this flee.
Dead end love
Prefixed above
No more quit
We both admit.
A contest entry
- shedevil by Myjoy.
450 points, ended December 4, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest for many types of poems, Prewrites allowed. by Systems Malfunction.
500 points, ended January 30, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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why you write this poem with sweet love in your heart. My sister became hard, forgot her brother, who is fond of her sister so much my 'Silvy'
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Leaves a bittersweet taste in the mouth of the reader. Very good write. Keep up the good writing hun! Keep smiling!
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Thanks for your comment.
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He hurts I hurt feeling like desert
I LOVED those lines
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thank you
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brevity
brevity is the soul of wit.....dense as honey drops...ya
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This is great. A simply written poem yet filled with emotions and images. I love the flow. Good luck in the contest!
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>>>>>>>>>>>> thoughtful comment<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<
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The end of a relationship can surely turn the sweetest woman into a shedevil.....revenge of the woman scorned...Nicely crafted.
good luck in the contest.
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thanks.
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i feel the pain
i like how you worded it. short and sweet
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Sad One? okay...thank you for your comment.
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sad, this is a bittersweet little read. Thank you for this entry. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
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