Memories of you remain in my mind,
of when I was just a boy,
I would sit in your room,
listen to your tales with a child's like joy.
I was 5 then and did not understand,
what you, you were trying to tell,
how you were locked up in a cell,
how the next 7 years would become your living hell.
They screamed at you in a language
you did not understand,
all you wanted was to fight for your country,
protect your home land.
Miles in mud you had to walk,
thinking of a family you left behind,
they slowly drifted out of your memory. ,
now fear controls your mind.
Your feet are bleeding and sore
as you keep on walking tall,
you were deviant, would not let them see you weak,
you just refused to fall.
The next stop you would write a letter, and then you would cry,
Letting your family know you were so alone and scared,
everyone who told you that when you fight you would come home a hero,
for this you were never really prepared.
Freedom came towards the end but the memories
stayed within your head,
Grandson he says, looked into my eyes
I am damn lucky I was,
[not many of young soldiers the dead.]
I remember those moments that we shared,
as your hand I hold in this hospital room,
I try to smile and keep a happy face,
the pain I try to consume.
The angels came and took ya hand,
I was sad but happy to see you go,
no more pain you would need to feel,
but there is just something I want you to know.
No matter how old I get how many years may pass
I will remember you when I am old and grey,
when my time has come I hope you are at those gates,
to lead me the magical way.
Comfort me when I am scared just like you use to do,
make me feel safe by holding my hand, no fear is so bad with you,
Grandpa I know you have left me in body, but ya memory has never gone,
these things are the reason I get through my day, and with life I can move on.
A contest entry
- just about anything :) by nobodys-girl.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 56 entries
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this tugged very hard on my heartstrings. a deep write full of emotion. well done on this!
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very nice
I CAN JUST HEAR THE CRIES OF THE GRANDFATHER!!! my heart aches for him in those times... those were the hardest times i think... very nice, lots of emotion... love it... -
What a beautiful tribute to your grandfather who you obviously had a very special bond with. Very touching write! Patty
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Oh wow, this is an amazing piece. I could really imagine it in my mind, that was how good it was. If it weren't for the fact that the rhythm wasn't completely consistent, this piece would be (nearly) perfect. Excellent write, thanks for sharing!
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... I can't.. believe this... I'm terriably sorry for your loss... thirteen years ago... I lost my baby sister. Great tribute to your Grandfather.
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I really like it.
Great write and a tribute to your grandpa.
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* cryes* wow .... that is such an amazing poem ... I loved it ...Made me feel weak and emotional ... I would have loved to say that to my grandad when he was around but sadly he died 2001 which broke me in half really bad , i still cry for him ... He was like a dad to me .... So just remember he is was always proud of you and still is . When the wind blows its him . When you feel the confort from the sun its him . Everything in your life is being watched by him . You are lucky to have a loving relationship with him , like me and my grandad . God bless you
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It's the memories that will make you strong now, that and living the way your grandfather would want you to. He seems to have been a very strong man and it is good that you got to be so close to him. She we all be so lucky.
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This poem has so much meaning to it. It shows your feelings in the past and now. I really like poems that are from the heart and this seems like one that it is! This poem is well written. Great job!
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very good!!! i cant say anything else...BRILL!!!!!!!!check mine out x
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i am very close to all my grandparents and i remember too well the pain of watching them slip away. this is a very nice write and im glad you have fond memeories of him. thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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That was sad... My dad is in Special Forces and I know I would be especially heartbroken if I had to endure him being a POW. This is a very emotional piece indeed. Fantastic Write.
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what a heart touching piece you wrote with all your humility and all your sentiments bringing the truth and universal touch of this beautiful life...Your words and the feelings are here with so much depth and with so much meaning as well..This is a beautiful verse showing your heart as a sacred piece of your poetic existence..well done and thanks for sharing it...
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omg, tissue anyone this was sad but it was a very good write, i hope your alright keep up the good work nice poem again,
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This had me in tears. I really admire your tribute and your feelings and understandings of your grandpa. Great write
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oh wow.. this is so sad and loving. i hope you can feel his love at the times you still need him... a very emotional piece thats very deep.
cheers
jen
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this was great. My grandpa was in vietnam as well. I am sorry for your loss though. He sounded like a great man just from reading the poem I could see that he had an effect on you.
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Amazing. This literally brought tears to my eyes. It's so emotional and very well written.. I think you show how close you and your grandfather were very well. The only spelling mistake i noticed was the first line of the seventh stanza, "memory's" should be "memories". Beautiful poem.
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Hi Son sadly to many of todays generation have never met or if they have had time to sit dawn and talk to their grand parents Such a sad thing as you poem shows just what they've missed most enjoyable read Excellent
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Apart from anything I IM I have seen no problem in this free verse poem. It is one of your best and brought with it tears to my eyes!
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good
I like it. The only things to fix are a few grammar errors. Change "memory's" to "memories," and "soar" to sore. Just things like that. Otherwise, it's really good! ^ - ^
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excllent... awesome i love it.... thanks so much for sharing this it means alot
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Thank mmook for the comment I hope to see some of yours works up soon.
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I feel not just the love but the respect brother dearest...to have this man, your grandpa for those years and those memories you hold so dear. I dont think words can say what i felt as i was reading your lines
I am just stand in respect of these men and women.
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You didn't tell me I would cry when I read this !
No wonder you want to publish a magazine of war poems so much babe, I understand that better now then I did a year ago.
This is sooo beautifully heart-touching and sad. You show your fierce loyalty and love to your GrandPa so flawlessly.
I know he is up there with the Angels watching you proud of you and everything you have overcome and proud of the man you are today.
Amazing write hunni, absolutely amazing.
Stay safe
Love ya
~Manda
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